this reads like an extract from a story, not a poem!

good

I read this and was surprised to find it very interesting! its good, very well portrayed

i liked this story, but please look at the punctuation requirements within it, other than that, i found it to be a good read

i like this, its a smahe it wasn't longer!

i fully understand what you're saying, in total agreement, we are now paying nearly $1.50 per litre here in the United Kingdom (England)

Yes i like this storyline, i would be really interested to read more

i loved reading this poem, wel set out and such a great read, original in its portrayal, please lets have more of the same!

this was interesting, but the short play on descriptive words, left me struggling a little! knowing what you want yourself and how you read this, as you're writing it, does not automaticly mean that others will view it the same way.