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AGE:
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LOC: Sri Lanka
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: May 18
LOC: Sri Lanka
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: May 18
Writer, journalist, budding poet. Currently working in corporate communication. i.e. professional bullshit artistry.
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Beyond our last tomorrow By: Theena Kumaragurunathan Love comes in four seasons: Spring, when the heart's flower blooms To the gentle rays of young love; Summer sees the flower become The root of greater gardens; Autumn and the flower begets The remembrance of its past so joyous; Winter comes last - not harsh nor cold Yet unwelcome still for its promptitude. I speak of the spring of our love - The dawning of metamorphosis most beautiful. I greet the sun with a smile on my face, I long to beho...
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As daylight waltzed away, night swung in, and silence drowned out the last decibel of sound, I woke up to the sounds of my own screaming. High notes of anguish. My dreams transformed me into a tenor of woe. The mirror in front of my bed reflected my weary sweat-soaked face, and the smiling moon outside the window. Full moon. Elsewhere in the city, religious festivals were probably underway to mark Vesak. Here, yours truly began another nocturnal day of looking over my shoulder, shouting at im...
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By: Theena Kumaragurunathan 2005 When love is a syllable and I am blind, Morning brings a sunset so unkind, When words and thoughts are distant foes, You and I are indisposed, When you float down the Nile - A Cleopatra whose farewell is not worthwhile - Eighteen, Oh sweet eighteen, A number so sweet I had to ask, Who writes my scripts, my lady? The first and second act, I wasn't there; The third brought love, I was vaguely aware; Then the lights dimmed, Curtains closed, I read the line: Seven...
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By: Theena Kumaragurunathan Till the tides of life lead me to fairer shores, I shall love thee and carry these sores, Till the wind blows me westward to the setting flame, More verses shall be inspired by thy name, Till this love be buried in the sand, Just once I desire to hold your hand, Till this chapter of life be studied and done, I am earth and you are the sun, Till love be gone and love be done, Then the tides of life have led me to fairer shores.
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By: Theena Kumaragurunathan I asked the officer, "What of my son? Is he on his way home In uniform sparkling bright? Or is he carrying a flag so white, And prolonging your plight?" He looked at me, Face sincere yet eyes untrue, A 'patriot', I thought, A father of a soldier he was too - The Happy-if-alive and Proud-if-dead type; Empathy, he never knew. He led me into that room, Where sons of our flag lay, Neatly lined - sons, caskets and flags - While tears I sought, And tears I fought, For t...
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I've not been on Urbis in ages and I certainly didn't imagine that I'd be reading, much less critiquing, a guide for digging one's nose for 'gold'. The questions at the beginning came across as one of those shopping channel adverts, but I have a feeling that you did this deliberately. Possibly parody. Do correct me if I am wrong. And it works. Throughout the piece, your tone and writing consistently comes across as one with tongue firmly in cheek.
1) Is it a good introduction? Yes. This is partly because you have an ability to bring to life characters. For someone your age, that is extremely rare. 2) Does the overall concept make sense? I am not sure what the overall concept is to be honest. A story of friendship is all I can read now. 3) Are the characters believable? Yes. As I wrote before, you have an ability to bring to life people - albeit ones who are of your generation. I'd be interested in reading how you handle people of olde...
Love it. Fabulous dialogue, fabulous characterizations. I haven't read the earlier conversations so my assessment is based solely on this particular piece. I love what I've read thus far. If anything it has convinced me to read your other work. Well done.
One of the elements that I really admire about this piece is that it could work as a stand alone piece - a short story - or as the launching pad of a larger narrative. If it's the former, you've done well to cover so much ground in such little time although I would love to read an exposition on Sam, particularly on his religious beliefs. If it's the latter then you certainly wet the appetites of your reader. Your prose is economical, measured and to the point. I particularly enjoyed your hand...
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