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AGE:
23
LOC: Philadelphia, PA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 02
LOC: Philadelphia, PA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 02
I am currently and English major finishing up my degree I’ve written all of my life but have trouble because I’m Dyslexic. That said I know that there are lots of errors that I miss constantly, but I write anyway; I’m a writer.
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How do I explain to you The hell that I’m being put through I live in an endless night Boggled down by the pains of life My thoughts Sometimes flow from me Like blood from open wounds I want to cry and I want to run away I want to find a way to just be… I don’t know I just know that I need or want And It can not be filled There are malfunctions in my brain Causing my hunger Understanding that I want someone Just to listen and understand That the blood in my veins is Cold and black I can only ...
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The writing bugs bite Making fingers itch Unable to remain still Eyes search For smooth surfaces sufficient Enough to birth the eloquent evocation Of written language that I had the urge to purge Brain becomes congested with bundles Of words Words while In the fog Of being ill And in the Fantastic flush of fever They pour, without Conscious careful connection Between Movement and letters Letters and words Words and meaning Meaning and poetry
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Silence In the back of “Bobby’s Bed and Breakfast”, she lay in the hammock hidden in the dark, watching the stars and the moon with her eyes as her mind wandered asking herself; ‘Things are changed, they’re different now, when did this all happen, anyway? And where did she come from?’ “Is this a party of one, or do you have room for one more?” “You have some of the worse lines I’ve ever heard, Baby Girl” The woman on the hammock answered “Yet you still keep me around.” Baby Girl leaned into ...
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Silence From the back of the Bobby’s Bed and Breakfast, she lay in the hammock hidden in the dark, watching the stars and the moon with her eyes as her mind wandered asking herself; ‘Things have changed, they’re different now, when did this all happen, anyway? Where did she come from?’ “Is this a party of one or do you have room for one more.” “You have some of the worse lines I’ve ever heard, Baby Girl” The woman on the hammock answered “Yet you still keep me around.” Baby Girl leaned into ...
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Walking the path This was a cool autumn day, past those Indian summer days, when the weather is warm and summer tries to hold on for just a little while longer. These were the days of bitter cold, coats and gloves, but not a snowflake in sight. The leaves had long since finished changing their colors and the trees began to show their true nature as the reds, golds and yellows fell lazily to the ground; Mother Nature was getting ready for bed. Have you ever noticed how the leaves, when you tro...
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I like this piece but I'm a little confused about the transition from the past to the future. it feels like the point of view is changed. i think.
I Really think that you have a solid begining here. I love the way you discribed the art of recieving a tattoo and how it can affect a person and you instantly added more mystery to the woman in this way. I think it would help if you could discribe the setting more; How were you positioned; what were you getting done,touch up, adding etc; you were able to see her arms and discribe her later, this can be explained if you tell us your positioning and her's, was the music loud or were you able t...
I really like the images that you have here, the picture is clear and easy to see. In your last stanza when you talk about being a "Protector of a woman, what exactly do you mean?, because if it is your mother, daughter, sister or fiance then you sould say that because it makes it more personal and it will round out the picture that you have already created. If it is a female friend or a girlfriend then I think that you have made the right choice. really like the poem, keep working!
The "not collecting time" to me means, a stop in time, a point when there is progression or regression.
its a little hard to undstand. Is this like saying that you made you bed now lie in it. Why are you lamenting? Did you know that you were going to feel pain or did it just happen.
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