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AGE: 33
LOC: Smyrna, GA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 28

I’ve “had the bug” since I was six and have always been writing. I’ve done some work as a free-lance rock writer, but my true loves are essays and fiction. However, being a busy professional, time to write has been scarce of late and I’m in constant search of inspiration – something to draw me back to the keyboard at the end of a long day. I’m here seeking encouragement, direction and inspiration.

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Novel Treatments / Untitled: Prologue
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5 Reviews   1 Comment
It all began with a bang. It was the sort of noise that in the midst of a typical spring day could’ve been mistaken for anything - the clapping of a gate, the fall of a window sash, the clatter of closing shutters, the slam of a car door. At first, it had gone unnoticed. Violet had been on her hands and knees in the kitchen garden pushing okra seeds into the damp, grey earth. She was focused, almost meditating, on the dull aching in her knees, the wet of the soil moistening the thin cloth of ...
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As spring erupts all around the great southern city of Atlanta, it reminds me of one thing…. okay so two things…. bikini season is rapidly approaching (yikes!) and my annual family reunion is just around the corner. Every June, my family pours in from all over the country and comes together for a smudge of a weekend to celebrate love, American style. We hug hello, eat our faces off, cry a few tears, laugh uproariously, eat some more, talk about what a great and unique family we have, while a...
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Yesterday, I stopped by the Starbucks in Little 5 Points, the closest chapel of the Church of Coffee, to visit a friend and find a little inspiration. For those that dabble, coffee is just a beverage, a quick pick-me-up to boost them through the day. For those of us “true believers,” coffee has become something of a new religion. Communion was to be delivered in the form of a tall peppermint mocha and I dutifully paid my tithe. Amen. Now, as with all religions, you will find your various lev...
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On, Oscar! On, Oliver! On, Hank and on, Jake! A whirling, tumbling, Boston-size quake, Barking, drooling, snorting and more They rolled down the hallway and crashed through the door! They rolled down the street, taking out cars and breaking down mailboxes, and tearing up yards. They frightened the neighbors and caused such a stir, This pooping and peeing Whirring cyclone of fur. Like termites with tails, they devoured a school, A junk yard, a restaurant, the neighborhood pool. They kept right...
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Short Story / Untitled: Prologue
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7 Reviews   1 Comment
It all began with a bang. It was the sort of noise that in the midst of a typical spring day could’ve been mistaken for anything - the clapping of a gate, the fall of a window sash, the clatter of closing shutters, the slam of a car door – all common elements in the din of a breezy spring Saturday. At first, it had gone unnoticed. Violet had been on her hands and knees in the kitchen garden pushing okra seeds into the damp, grey earth. She was focused, almost meditating, on the dull aching in...
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Non-fiction / To My Dear Friend
Uhhhhh... I'm a little confused here. This isn't a 'piece' - it's a letter, and a very personal one at that. The entire time I was reading this, I was a) shocked that someone would post something so personal in such a public forum and b) feeling awful for the person to whom it was directed. In this format, this comes across, not as an attempt to gain insight into the craft of writing, but as an attempt to kick a friend when they're down by airing their dirty laundry in front of a thousand str...
Poetry / Thank You
"You are the one I have turned to when troubles have seemingly overwhelmed." - seemingly overwhelmed what? Insert noun here... I think you really need the "me" that this sentence implies - it seems very incomplete and stunted without it. "To you, I wish jubilation in all excursions." "You are relief with comedic entertainment," I understand what you're doing here, but it doesn't work well. It almost reads as if it was written by someone to whom English is not their native tongue. It doesn't f...
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Poetry / My Burning Pyre
My love for them Is my ending And I am wrought On a burning pyre. Your use of the word "wrought" conjures conflicting images. You talk of an ending and a pyre is a method of destruction and carries the image of that ending. However, the word "wrought" means to produce something and because of that, it creates a contradiction and confusion. May I see the light From so deep? Within the blood engorged catacombs Of my heart? The use of the word "may" doesn't work as it implies that you're asking ...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / IVY
"arousing my senses and making me wish [Doc] was wrong about the effects of too much caffeine; but I knew he wasn’t." Is "Doc" the name of a person or are you referring to "the doc?" This is unclear. "I drink my first cup of coffee with whatever I whip up for breakfast. Doc would really cringe at some of the stuff I eat; " - you start the chapter in past tense and then switch here to present tense. It's critical that you fix this. "The mountain was named in honor of the chief of the Waronokes...
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