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AGE: 39
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 19

I drive buses and write short stories.
I live in Northern England.

Please feel free in your critisism.

Influences include: Borges,Orwell,Calvino,Kafka,Magnus Mills,James Kelman,Pk Dick.

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Short Story / The story teller
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Rain falls steadily from the Manchester sky, grey and dreary drops drip from massed umbrellas. My eyes carelessly follow the shoes of splashing shoppers who jink around the puddles in the streets. The windscreen wipers swish passed my arc of vision at 5 second intervals, clearing the gathering drops. Each drop contains a minute red reflection of the stalled tail lights of the evening traffic. If I close my eyes I am in Pakistan, I am eight and sat on sun hot rocks, on the low ridge above my v...
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Short Story / Baba and Me
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Rain falls steadily from the Manchester sky, grey and dreary drops drip from massed umbrellas. My eyes carelessly follow the shoes of splashing shoppers who jink around the puddles in the streets. The windscreen wipers swish passed my arc of vision at 5 second intervals, clearing the gathering drops. Each drop contains a minute red reflection of the stalled tail lights of the evening traffic. If I close my eyes I am in Pakistan, more than three decades ago, I am eight and sat on sun hot rocks...
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“This is a lovely place, you’ve got here. A nice wee parlour and is that a kitchen through there? Do you still cook all your own meals?” The postman, poked his head through the door but Granny didn’t invite him in, she placed one arm across the door frame barring his way. She took a drag from a small cigar and blew smoke in his face. The mail began to sort itself behind him, thousands of letters poured into the multicoloured hoppers. He didn’t even blink “...
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Short Story / Under the eaves
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Don’t worry I’ll explain all this as we go along. You’re going to be hearing from a few different voices, but don’t get scared, because I’m going to help you out. First and foremost there is Ralph he’s what I am calling the protagonist today, he talks like this: “My name is Hagbiter and I know no fear, I have stared death in his sickly face and laughed. I have slain the Bull man of Halrith and cast my net for the Kraken in the dark sea of Krull. I ha...
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Short Story / Change of a Dress
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A glance into the dingy back bedroom of the last lodging house on the left in Cornwall Street revealed Emily Daniels dressed in an exquisite ball gown, tears streaking her face. The Doctor placed his foot in her back and seized hold of the garments collar. The two women in the room likewise took a firm grip on the dress. “Right......after three. Pull!” They tugged at the dress until Emily started to sob. It would not come off. “Been like this since last night” “S...
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / A Glimpse of Huddersfield
Marvellous....different and quite interesting. Love the wrestling angle and the naked lunch Huddersfield tie-in is interesting. Nice to read some original work on Urbis. Too many buffy the vampire clones. The triangle choke is a very strong image. I can see the action clearly. This is worth pursuing in my opinion. Strong writing about a strong subject. The coke snorting taxi ride is less memorable but it feels like an after thought.Hopefully you can develop this more. Thanks for sharing...goo...
Horror / Cannibal
In my opinion this piece requires a little more work before you could get it published. After reading it I was left with questions and feeling confused as to your meaning. The story sounds like you are trying to right a rscue mission with a twist. One where the demon wins leaving the reader who has been with brant the p.o.v character feeling like the rug has been pulled. I think you could improve the piece by giving us an insight into how Brant is thinking.i.e His internal monologue. I was le...
Short Story / Untitled- Version 2
The idea for the starting paragraph is strong, but you could really work harder at it. This is your big chance to sweep us into the story. Spend more time on the atmosphere of the club. Go through your senses show us wahat you see, hear and feel. You can give us a great insight into your character by a description of how she is dressed and made up. Why not spend a whole paragraph on this? If the reader thinks this person looks and sounds like a cheap slut then they you will get a better react...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / War On Our World
Hi there, Firstly it is difficult to give you help with grammar and spelling with this piece being in the abstract. However if you post some of the actual work I am sure you will get plenty of advice. Your story sounds like classic Science fiction. Remeniscent of H.G. Wells. Science fiction works well when it holds up a mirror to our present world and draws parallels. You talk about a world surviving an alien invasion which declines into an era of repression. Do you have something to say thro...
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / A Glimpse of Huddersfield

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