I found your short story to be a touching, final goodbye to a perhaps deadbeat father. I found the strong imagery used to express vivid emotion to be the strongest aspect of the piece. I can't think of any suggestions... to me it seems honest and real. That is all a story really needs.

I really enjoy reading your pieces. They may be short, but they are told in a casual, storytelling fashion. This one in particular is pretty funny. Odd things can happen when you are crowded in a bus. The "lost the erection by starting to think about his girlfriend" line is wicked. Nice.

I think that this poem is a great start. I thought it was cool because we all grab a pillow wishing it was a warm body next to us. A couple of more verses and it could be a heartbreaker of a poem. I gave it a six merely because of the length issue. But for what it is, I like it.

Interesting idea and approach. I have read poems about loved ones being killed or dying, but never by a lion. Some of the word use sounded odd, like "convert my eyes." Overall, an enjoyable work.

This piece is a very nice read. The sentences flow well together, and the word choice is superb. I also enjoyed the idea of research being the main subject. We do use it quite it a bit in writing. I did think that the paragraph that contained the long list of different subjects used in research was a bit much. I got your point, but maybe you can shorten the paragraph a bit while still maintaining the humor. I like the Genius concept used in the writing as well. Smart approach and well-written...

From reading, I found the poem to be a strong snapshot of innocence and growing up. The lines are short, yet powerful in their message. I wouldn't change anything. Nice work.