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AGE:
31
LOC: Defuniak Springs, FL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 13
LOC: Defuniak Springs, FL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 13
I do a lot of things. Painting, photographing and writing being my favorite outlets for creativity and expression. This is the first time that I’ve ever shared my writings in such an open forum. But so far, so good. A lot of the reviews are honest and constructive.
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open your eyes to the light of the truth away from the serpent's lies... so smooth tickling in and out of your virgin ears creating an image of all goodness smeared making you an insignificant pawn in play without thought or opinion to voice each day taking all power inheritably yours that which makes your sweet spirit soar above the cruelty and injustice of the wretched world to change and create an vision.. not blurred by the rich man's drugs, money, images, and lies breaking the iron chain...
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lids close over eyes as if to be tucking them in under heavy linens, mind drifts over years, over faces to find yours, crisp and fresh as springtime, your scent lingers in the air i inhale like ghostly manifestation embracing me taking me back to the moment i almost let myself get lost in the illusion of you, a thousand shots of sambuca and still, the impression of you clings to me weaving in and out through nervous system like a mad weed suffocating like the smoggy haze of cloves and menthol...
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Sleep... hold me close in the hours before daybreak Glassy eyed euphoria accompanies me tonight As I work away, off the fumes of whatever energy I have left Down to the last bit of consciousness Before the metamorphasis into waking zombie comes about Every night is the same Every day drains the life out of me But this is the only way (you see) To find the peaceful tranquility only the dead know Sleep... hold me close in the hours before daybreak The mind quabbles and quakes within Analyzing, ...
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Shhhhh... hush to the soft beat of hearts intermingling the dance of skin and touch play out to the slow groove brimming over with intensity spilling over to the realms of becoming tipping over any false barriers the subtlety of his lips against mine... sharing breath, giving life Have I ever felt this way? Seems to be the birth of a new day the resurrection of a feeling thought lost to the cosmos a homecoming to a place so familiar yet so foreign his open arms... all I've ever wanted trust l...
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a fire burns within nestled in the sweltering dark nether regions secretly simmering with desire musky and heavy like a humid summer's day on my lips lingers the thousand caresses of sweet kiss' embrace... sensual, soft the dance of breath exchanged between each slip of the tongue sexy... yeah, thats what you are night upon night, i lay here reminiscing over pleasures given and received romantic interludes of honey covered nothings whispered the avalanche of emotions that have swept over me t...
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I like the repetition of "one" throughout the poem. Some may think that the repetition is a bit much. But it's a short poem so I really don't think it's that big of a deal. I think it weaves all the different expressions of love together and their significance in respect to a couple. I enjoyed it. Keep writing. :)
This was incredibly amusing!! I loved all the nonsense and absurdity. When I read the "Notes for Reviewer", I almost thought they'd be more amusing than the actual piece but I was happily mistaken. For some reason, this piece made me feel like I was listening to a Gogol Bordello song without any music.
That was wonderful! I couldn't help but giggle and smile at the end as I read your father's reply. Well done. You captured my attention and kept it all the way through. I especially liked the way your wrote in their accents.
I really enjoyed the rhyme scheme in this one. I also liked that you ended the poem with the repetition (of sorts) of the 3rd and 4th line of the poem. I like how the narrator is confident and playful as well as carefree and happy to just spend time with the person he/she is addressing. Well done.
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