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AGE:
23
LOC: Champaign, IL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 22
LOC: Champaign, IL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 22
-One who enjoys reading and writing poetry.
-One who prefers the rhyming type, but will try to broaden spectrums.
-One who doesn’t leave overly negative reviews.
-A straight African American Male.
-A College Student (21 yrs)
-An Artist.
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Observe A school of fish goes swimming by beneath a water clear as sky shimmering in the golden light cast from stars intensely bright doing naught to cause us harm engaged deep in things found fun a splash is heard as time flys by Beautiful. Now watch it die A touch of darkness hides your sight covering those once bathed in light now they shiver, filled with fright wondering what has caused their plight oil is poison off the shore nonetheless, it's there in stores one by one they know no mor...
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In the places you call home stress is evil, stress is wrong so you do what you have honed keeping peace as you go on Now they're fighting, gauntlet thrown soon to reap what they have sown he said, she said; you don't know this fight wasn't in your zone Jack be nimble, jack be quick jack knocked down the candle stick now the fire's spreading fast built to linger, built to last In the places you call home keeping peace is all you've known now they ask your thoughts be loaned so you give from wh...
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May it always be That kids of Adam and Eve Always have some creed
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Be that as it may i'm forced to admit today everyone holds sway
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Long ago on Earth most strangers would show their worth that's gone since our birth
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Interesting. And really depressing. Hard to follow at times, flow wise, but caught my attention.
Hmmm. Short yet sweet. It grabbed my attention briefly, then left me wanting more.
I didn't really feel the work. I found it a little humorous, but that's about it. maybe it's just me. I did like the structure though. it adheres to the ancient haiku guidlines in a way where more can be conveyed to the reader. good effort.
I don't often read these type of poems. They're just not my cup of tea, though i should try to broaden my spectrum a bit more. I did find it deeply intriguing though. I really the repetition of the first and last stanzas, as i often do that myself. i feel it helps to more easily deliver the message. good job!
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