torn into pieces or tear into pieces? grammar is essential to the smooth flow of the story and the captivation of the reader.

this is a limerick??

very good limerick. true to form and humorous.

an interesting story. the battle for chastity she puts herself through is adnirable. i imagine she is to become a nun or something and her former lover wants to help her make the transition by denying her his affections. an admirable move for him as well. but i dont get the feeling from this that he has any suppressed desires for her. maybe he is turned off to the thought of being with a nun-to-be or is he just turned off by her in general? that is the question in my head.

interesting. easy to read. good question at the end. i dont think it is recycled, but maybe when they run out... or maybe the first ssn was 001. just kidding. could use a ? at the end.

wow. i like that. it paints quite a picture. nice flow. easy to read and very descriptive.