its good very good to be published in a book most likley you could turn that poem into a whole story

i think i understand this but at the same time i dont thats the beauty in this poem makes it mysterious and well just plain good

Its cool how you made it seem like your talkin about a loved one or friend but in the end just about you self nice.

nice medaphores and nice rhyming best lines to me were - If winter comes with blinding light, To hide away the world outside could mean much more that it seems.

a hot bath im guessin expecting alot different from the start way to confuse! nice!

Only to be awaken by dawn’s flame - i belive that has to say a brighter day its a good way to say it. Unlock the tongue ignorant of sin- this line wasent needed in my opinion A cold apparition a glistening blaze- this dosent go with the other three lines its with those connect perfectly

seems like you notice alot of the small things that count most in that first paragraph I was just another punk kid on their list of punk kids that they get paid to look at - this line seems like your one of them but dont like what you are could use a little work but then mabey its just perfect the way it is

i like the originality in this one its feels right you know? keep it up