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It was very, very entertaining even though the theme was a bit corny in nature. I think that this song could easily be turned into a satirical production, and a possibly an e-hit.

I really like the poetry of the song, and it conveys something that I'm sure some of the readers that will happen upon this have experienced. The only thing I might point out, is that it reads - as I said previously - like poetry, rather than a song. Merely because there is not a consistent rhyming pattern. So if your intention is to make this song extremely catchy, you may lose more than a few audience members simply because there is no simple pattern that they can "hook" on to. Perhaps revi...