Best described with one word: Spectacular.

The lyrics -could- work, and very easily for a rap song (As I assume that is what your going for here). But I would suggest that if your trying to get into rap, apparently (unless you want to be underground) you can't convey a message that is too deep and political. You must be in "The paper race" as you called it. Keep it up.

The format was messed up so I'll take the time to change it up so you can C&P it :-) Freedom - waits for me blindly The cherries trees are haunting Here – unfolding February Late in the day – I hope that you will remember All the words I haven’t had the courage... All these mornings left to assure us... Another year gone by & lost beneath the snow I await your simple tone You sound so far away – so far away from home You are all I’ve ever known... But I never thought I could reach you - teach...

While the lyrics themselves work quite well, I find myself wanting a bit more out of them. I think if you tried being a bit more complex with your song, I'd be more inclined to give a higher talent rating, or admiration rating. So even though the song itself is written in a clean, catchy fashion; I find myself wanting so much more out of a set of lyrics. I suppose you could say that is simply preference though. On a side note, if these were a set of lyrics for mainstream music (Which I think ...

I personally would not change in this arrangement. On a personal level, I find that it reads more like a poem, even though it is clearly written as a set of lyrics. I'm not entirely sure why, but I'm sure you know what I'm talking about. At any rate, great writing.

I have nothing more to say than: fantastic.

It is a relatively good song, but the only thing you want to do is keep the lines rhyming. If your going to rhyme in some of the verses, you need to do so for the others, or you risk losing interest in the reader. If the pattern is not congruent, you tend to have a confused audience.

I really like the poetry of the song, and it conveys something that I'm sure some of the readers that will happen upon this have experienced. The only thing I might point out, is that it reads - as I said previously - like poetry, rather than a song. Merely because there is not a consistent rhyming pattern. So if your intention is to make this song extremely catchy, you may lose more than a few audience members simply because there is no simple pattern that they can "hook" on to. Perhaps revi...

It was very, very entertaining even though the theme was a bit corny in nature. I think that this song could easily be turned into a satirical production, and a possibly an e-hit.