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LOC: United States
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LAST LOGIN: May 21
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 21
“who scribbled all night rocking and rolling over lofty incantations which in the yellow morning were stanzas of gibberish”
-Howl by Alan Ginsberg
my name is megan, i am fifteen years old and enjoy writing short stories and poetry.
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Icarus icarus did your eyes turn wide and desperate with the stilling of your heart with the naive realization of your mortality as your wings burned to wax no longer a force beyond your own humble earth as the clouds looked on above light and apathetic as the sun burned with loss having only wanted in that brief moment to reach out and touch your golden skin your wings that had both defied her and finally ended abruptly the silent longing that had heavy filled her belly icarus did your eyes ...
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the sunlight (for Karen M. Gray on her fifteenth birthday) the sunlight holding itself against you knows with intrinsic knowledge every freckle every spot where it has kissed your skin burning itself against you aware of the limitations of its time wanting only to burn deeper to permeate your skin pervade your existence and pronounce you immortal yet it knows with intrinsic knowledge to extend your existence would also be to end it and so it holds itself against you always ever aware of every...
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Tonight, I swear I can hear the musica universalis, the music of the spheres. Tonight, as I gaze up at the heavens, the stars weeping down their light, it is no longer purely a mathematical concept. I can feel the planets spinning, the beauty of numbers in motion, numbers, numbers as innumerable as the stars heavenward, each burning with an identity of their own, each my kin. Both humble and bold, venturesome and timid, lovely and fearsome, they come achingly alive. They waltz; they run; the...
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Part One: Elliott, May 8th I watch as she throws herself backward to the green grass of Deakin Park, smiling upwards toward sky and sun and God. Calliope Gray surrounds me. At dusk, I will walk home to an impoverished, one-room apartment after seeing her safely to her own, and, while lying in bed, I will look up and see the first of many sketches of her. Every time I turn, the eyes on canvases will speak, will cry, will shine like her eyes, roses will bloom on cheeks, and lips will curve upwa...
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epitaph for guy verlaine the stars were silent never conveying sympathy but burning burning our sorrow and when they deemed it time for my sorrow to end they sent down one of their innumerable number to crash into me and burn the life out and burn the death in and joyous I returned to Valentine for whom my sorrow burned like so many stars epitaph for valentine verlaine ever atlas i held his world on weakening shoulders painting his smiles when he smiled painting his eyes when he did not and e...
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i never look at lyrics, but i was quite pleasantly surprised at this one. this wasn't trite nor did it say "baby" at all. fantastic. you've really captured what the past feels like. not nostalgic, but honest. you have great images, i.e. the oars and sailors, and great lines such as "we shared our shivers hand in hand". i would alter the title, however, it doesn't really speak for the song, perhaps "these fountains in the square" or a variant, would be much more catching. that, and you shouldn...
this is... very interesting. it was quite enjoyable, but just so far out of the usual spectrum, that it's difficult to rate. through the whole story and especially at the end, the reader is hit with the suspicion that all is not right with the narrator. it's very sinisterly delightful. my only suggestion is that you might lengthen the story, it shows great promise for showcasing the odd world of the narrator, perhaps in a very david lynch reminiscent way. sinister, but delightful, very intere...
how ironic that you ended up creating it! hahaha. i adored this! it was more than enjoyable to read, it was fun. the images incited are clear and sharp, and the reader is able to feel the full effect of them. you use strong language on the whole, as well, "annihilates" etc. the reader really can get a feel for how it feels to destroy poetry, and beyond the humour, there is the last line, which is very intriguing, it gives the poem more meaning. the only change i would make is altering the fir...
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i dug this, and i see where you were going with this, but i don't think you completely made it. in the beginning you were very regular poetry-oriented, it seemed like you were going for an image inciting, emotion/lack of emotion oriented, then towards the end, starting at the sixth stanza, it went the other way completely. you're images need to be sharper, too. this was enjoyable, and you got the point across, but it was just too divisioned. good work, but it needs work.
i very much enjoyed this. i enjoyed the humorous aspect of the beginning, but especially enjoyed the philosophic reflection incited of nature and man. i'd fine tune the humorous aspect, it has potential, but it is just a little off. the second stanza, or whatever, is actually much more humorous, which i think is fantastic. very good work, you managed to be very entertaining and enjoyable while inciting reflection, a feat no doubt. great work, i very much enjoyed it!
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