Wow, it is a very sad song. I could imagine the music behind it. The lyrics are a bit cliche, but overall understandable in new ways.

Sounds wierd, but the only thing I could do while reading this is laugh. I like the repetitive "assholes" and the little quirks of humor that just appear seemingly out of nowhere.

Very good description. I agree whole heartedly with what you wrote in this. I noticed a misplaced word here and there, but altogether I think it brings out the descriptions more. The last line is classic.

Saluting presidential kisses. Is that like getting the art put in a gallery or paying respect to those who purchase or obtain the art? It seems like the artist has a motivational drive from a loved one? The ending was an amazing mixture of words, easy to read and meaningful.

The actions in this are amazing, I really enjoy a lot of the 2nd to 3rd line transitions. You could add a couple words to help with the flow, mainly in the first and the last blocks. Everything is here though, description, thoughts, nice work.

Speedy piece, maybe a few more words to the lines would make it a bit better in my opinion. Great message as well.

Hahaha. I find this hilarious, just because of the buildup of somebody maybe being naked or something, but then cannabalism kicks in and so does the humor in my opinion.

I like the description of the scenes, people and sorroundings. You have what to me looks like a very fresh writing style, fresh but still tied together with a lot of great authors I've read from. Very introspective piece, intelligent characters, which is obviously proven by their subjects of conversation. I like how the narration doesn't sully their interaction as well.

The form of your writing really reflects what I think is an overall disappreciation of the world. Not a bad thing by any means, because sadness is a pens best friend. Very nice I actually found myself exclaiming a few of the lines. In the back of a strangers van, now that line had some power. It's a great thing to be real and not sugar coat things.

Very nice wording in this one. Mind bender really it is. I wish more people could see writers as an important part of sociality. Without us, there would be no movies or great times at said movies with loved ones and friends.