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AGE: 30
LOC: Portage, IN
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 14

When I first joined Urbis, I was searching for peace and pieces of a better me through words.  Since then, I’ve gained a better understanding of myself and my world.  I hope my words can reach out and work for someone besides me because they definitely heal in times of sorrow.  Peace to the Poets, the Prophets, the People.

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Poetry / A Musing
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He told me that his muse was asleep. I pictured a nude figure twisted between sheets, dreaming in spectrums of reality. I wondered if those dreams spoke in guttural sounds about dark alleyways framed in features of the forgotten searching through rotten garbage for dinner. I wondered if their faces reflected the ruin of places decorated in fast food wrappers void of laughter- and if those dreams smelled like corners soaked in the piss, sweat, tears and blood of victims condemned to die like c...
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Poetry / Killin' Your Son
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Killin’ Your Son The shadow of a missin’ Father holds The son hostage. Feelin’ abandoned, he chases ghosts Around dark corners Spyin’ for a glimmer or a glow. Instead of Apollo, The boy finds artificial Illuminations That buzz and flicker Wit’ the warmth of uncertainty. The next thing Mama know, Her little boy’s Playin’ grown-man Games. Ya see, They started throwin’ Dice against that Cardboard cause Nobody ever wanted To be cops— Just robbers. As he treks Further from id He never arrives at s...
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Poetry / Sanctuary
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I bumped my head a million times on that table, Grandma’s dining room table. For everyone else it was a place to eat, But, for me, it was a place of peace. I sat beneath the clear glass watching a world that had nothing to do with me, yet I could not divert my eyes. I listened to the murmur of voices that seemed so far away, and smelled the sweet aroma of love rise from plates of yams, fried fish, and collard greens. And I thought. I spent somber instances silently, and mulled over memories a...
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Poetry / Allegory
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I wish that I could write a happy ending to this life. Mending broken, blotted hearts delivering some light- to the depths of shaded souls and shattered lives of battered wives- to the drug addicted thugs convicted lost in scattered lies- to the haggard homeless masses harassed for sleepin in the park- to the little kids neglected and ones molested in the dark- to the junkies snortin 'caine or pushin smack into their veins- to hapless hookers smokin crack to alleviate the pain. This is for- t...
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Poetry / Tapestry
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The letters that you see upon this miniature poster were originally hand stitched after hours of concentration under skeptical light. Every thread of creation was carefully selected from spools of sorrow, wonder and insecurity and placed by a steady hand to create the likeness of a man teetering on the edge of instability. I wove uncertainty into his brow and yoked it with the confidence embroidered upon his smile. I used melancholy filaments to construct woe and contrast the delight surround...
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Poetry / "Paleta!"
I absolutely love the feeling of this poem. I think the beginning is strong, but would be stronger with an overt negative trait for "corner groceries". The paleta is the prize of the poem, so "run-down houses" and "abandoned lots" emphasize that much more than the last phrase. There's this great leisure feeling I get reading the poem, and it reminds me how little kids gobble up ice cream on city streets during the summer months without regard for the stains on their hands, faces and clothing....
You have some nice phrases and ideas in this poem. It opens nicely with "The leaves rustled," and I like how the smell of dust is welcoming and reaching the narrator's nostrils. The use of smell is really important to the poem, so I'd keep pushing for stronger images (like "the rich smell of fragrant grass"); see if you can make the readers smell it. I like the child beat of the drum, but I think you should make it more stilted to communicate the irregularity of the thunder. "Thum...thum,thum...
Haiku/Senryu / Gabriel's message
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Honestly, I hate rating people. Rating someone's talent is like giving a grade for someone's emotional state. Nevertheless... I think the idea here is wonderful. I really like how the comforter overflows onto the floor as if it were liquid. I also enjoyed how the flash back describes this task as a battle; how the other person was victorious and "slew the oversized" beast. There are few other metphoric descriptions, but the strength lies in the story. In this process of doing something, somet...
Poetry / Hosmer
The quality of description is exceptional. Nothing really surpasses "Clinging dew..." I love that line. Everything up to this point is strong. Skinny dipping in the exposed nakedness of the water is genius. Overall, I thought the images were amazing razors but, clarity is lost (for me) in "trailing me tonight". At that point, I become concerned where the "me" is in respect to all that surrounds her or him. The ambiguity here might be intentional, but that's one of the reasons for the "9". The...
100.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)