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LOC: Everett, WA
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LAST LOGIN: December 14
LOC: Everett, WA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: December 14
this Thinker, Dreamer,
Philosopher, Ethicist,
inspired, creates.
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Jer'my Bentham and John Stuart Mill liked to compare the good and the ill "more for most" was the best when not sure, they just guessed (and Peter Singer's doing it still)
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John Locke, Tom Hobbes and Rousseau asked why society had so much woe Hobbes blamed our bad seed and Rousseau claimed, "it's Greed." But Locke said, "Inflation must go."
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Tom Hobbes, Jean Rousseau and John Locke Of Society thought to take stock Hobbes' Leviathan rant (which he wouldn't recant) led Jean/John to proclaim, "What a ... rock."
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Song sans melody, in time, An Orphean quest -- reprised Will the Muses mourn once more? Aristotle's mockery, that elusive Arete, O, vindictive hart pursued! Wisdom, Power, Love all vie for the trusting, human soul -- golden object of their lust. Blessed as Pygmalion, or cursed as Pandora, Through it all, Hope lingers yet The brand that scorched the Titan, outshone by heart's inferno, Ash rinsed clean by stoic tears Sweet hemlock of pathos brewed the cup o'erflows -- Agape springs up where Phi...
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Nicely done! I had some flea problems too, and this spoke to me. Are "kits" referring to kittens or flea removal kits?
Wow, gory! Maybe you could use: "prey", "nutrition", "table scraps" - depends on what feel you want - objectifying the prey or focusing on its relation to the eater. Perhaps "delectable prey"?
Nice structure for this piece. Having the last stanza refer to sinners seemed to suggest a less "complete" ending, but the "forgiven" at the end helps round it off.
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Love your word choice and imagery in this! Tightening up the last two lines of first two stanzas (drop a couple syllables) will make it flow more smoothly. Great social commentary, and good job rhyming the long words!
I like the aim of the meter here. L3: take out "a" for smoother meter. L5: take out "our", but I can't get "mercy" to fit meter, maybe another word? L8: intentionally not starting with "by" here? It was nice in previous stanzas, maybe you could keep the structure here too? Last stanza - nice idea, last line could be extended to fit better.
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