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AGE: 33
LOC: Bartlesville, OK
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 09

i am a 32 year old mother who has been using poetry as an outlet since i was nine. i love reading and writing poetry. I accept all criticisms but will be quick to use my own judgment on my poems. I try to offer opinions to aid but fully expect if my opinions fail to be what you need for you work for you to ignore me! :)

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Novel Treatments / Elizabeth
Version 7
9 Reviews   6 Comments
Chapter One To whoever may find this, I realize I was fairly naive. I believed the world would change for me. I thought I would be able to do anything. I know better now. I should have known then. I ask that you reserve your judgments until my tale is finished. The year is fourteen ninety-eight. I had thought that in the reign of Henry the VII that England would be civilized. I was born to a noble house and having always had plenty of money. I never abused my wealth, That goes against my natu...
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Poetry / Truest Love
Version 1
2 Reviews   3 Comments
I sit alone In a darkened room Aching to hold you. I sit wondering If you will ever want Me in your life. The pain rolls down Past the pieces of my heart. In drops of liquid love. You are the piece That could make me whole, Yet, for your sake, I turned away…
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Short Story / Elizabeth
Version 5
13 Reviews   8 Comments
I realize I was really naïve. I believed the world would change for me. I thought I would be able to do anything. I know better now. I should have known then. I ask that you reserve your judgments until my tale is finished. The year is fourteen ninety-eight. I had thought that in the reign of Henry the VII that England would be civilized. I was born to a noble house and having always had plenty of money, I never thought much of it, though I never abused my wealth. That goes against my nature....
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Short Story / Elizabeth
Version 4
1 Review   1 Comment
I realize I was really naïve. I believed the world would change for me. I thought I would be able to do anything. I know better now. I should have known then. I ask that you reserve your judgments until my tale is finished. The year is fourteen ninety-eight. I had thought that in the reign of Henry the VII that England would be civilized. I was born to a noble house. I was born to a noble house and having always had plenty of money, I never thought much of it, though I never abused my wealth....
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Poetry / thoughts
Version 1
4 Reviews   7 Comments
a thought in mind, of a life left behind. a song blinding me, with lyrics that share a broken soul. feeling surprise that another feels the pain within, I find myself looking towards divinity. where is the cheer and the innocent fear? the hope and dreams Fall away leaving behind cynicism and regret. are all things old being done again? a unending cycle of pain and fear going on year after year Or is the music that is speaking to my broken heart not from truth but from someone's thoughts loose...
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Khakis
this was wonderful. it has all the best elements of a good blog. I really see no way to improve beyond the grammer issues you already acknowledged.
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Bookstore
first of all i like the thought of word pugilists. that to me seems very novel. this was well written although very short. i wanted more. the genre lends itself to short i realize, however this left things out i found myself asking for more detail... was the person there for a job, for conversation, just to find a book? and such as that. love the emotion that shone through this though.
Humor/Satire / Frisky on Fridays
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Your descriptions are great, however it seems like there is alot left out of the story. I enjoyed it though and would gladly read more of it.
Novel Treatments / Tristans Requiem - 1
i like the descriptive imagery in this. I could see the isle and its inhabitants clearly. I would love to read more of this, it is wonderful!