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AGE: 27
LOC: Fredericksburg, VA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 15

I have never been comfortable showing my work to other people before, but my friend showed my this site and I thought it would be much easier learning to put myself out there for strangers than it would be for friends.

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Short Story / Seriously Dark
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Seriously Dark The room was dark when Jacob entered through the scratched wooden door. I was sitting in a chair in the far corner of the room. He looked nervous, his eyes surveying the area in little jerks to the left and right. “Where are you?” He called softly into the darkness. “Right here.” I purred and flicked on the small lamp next to me. He squinted at the change in lighting and then glared at me. “I came to see if you were alright. Your phone call scared me last night. I though you we...
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Short Story / Seriously Dark Pt. 3
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It was still early when he reached her apartment; Jacob had thoughts about barging into her apartment and confronting her, but instead he waiting. He had to see for himself… He sat across from her building in his darkened car leafing through a folder of Xerox papers and some documents he managed to acquisition with no questions asked. As he read more and more pieces clicked into place. He had no doubt that Christy was the one he was after. He constantly scribbled in his notebook as he waited ...
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Short Story / Seriously Dark Pt. 2
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With my apartment spotless and some much needed maintenance out of the way I spent the good part of a week wondering what I would do to entertain myself until my body had healed. Most of my victims stashed plenty of cash under their mattresses and in various nooks and crannies around their places so there was no need for me to work. After I quit my full time job to start my hunting I worked a part time job at a legal building to keep up appearances, but more than once I ran into someone who r...
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Short Story / Seriously Dark Pt. 1
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Seriously Dark The room was dark when Jacob entered through the scratched wooden door. I was sitting in a chair in the far corner of the room. He looked nervous, his eyes surveying the area in little jerks to the left and right. “Where are you?” He called softly into the darkness. “Right here.” I purred and flicked on the small lamp next to me. He squinted at the change in lighting and then glared at me. “I came to see if you were alright. Your phone call scared me last night. I though you we...
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Poetry / Soldier
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I have been marching Too far to be walking And nights are empty With my wars in sin I’m feeding the passion Of the lonley heart’s lust Why stop pretending? Why amble on? Then it grabs my all Pain washes out Some go on trudging On roads to nowhere Then I am broken The moment is done Do I resume walking? Give me a sign Lost faith this time I choose my resting place Beaten, heavy hearted Maybe life will find me On plains of wilderness And still-life art None weights my inner Or blunts my heart
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Novel Treatments / Johnny Says - Chapter One
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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Baby-doll
I like this. It is hard to tell what the nature of the deals these men are making, but I guess that is yet to be revealed. I found a few errors/confusing parts, but other than that great job. *She leaves the scene as quickly as she came, though she never came* Is this supposed to be As though she never came? *She runs, an air of resignation,* With an air of? *She knows I’ll be thrilled with this new turn of events, and wonders, like a baby fascinated by a light display, what I’ll do to raise ...
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Beautiful. It seems more like free verse than a short story, but no matter what the label I like it. I have lost a child and these feelings that you have put down, whether real or fictional, really speak to me. I especially like the last line. Great job.
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Very very interesting! I think the last chapter seemed a little hurried. Not much description, no details about what the woman looks like, or really what Rick looks like either. Also since reading this I am confused about Jeremy. He is American? From the first chapter I thought he was African. Maybe be a little clearer about this fact. The only other thing I noticed was *Sinious* when you are talking about Eddie smoking, Im not sure what you are trying to illustrate here. Other than that awes...