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Poetry / Fishing
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It is the twilight of night. I sit alone at the edge of the silent shore. I see the silkened water. Shimmering the reflection of the mysterious moon. The warm breeze gently whispers into my ear. And strokes the surface of the darkened waters. In the reflection the brilliant moon trembles. I watch in fascination. Yet, reason controls rhyme. At a blink of an eye. I look up to realize the moon does not tremble at all. It lives upon the twilight sky in the land of a billion stars. I question the ...
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Quotes / Doubt
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Seducing shadow embracing doubt. Intrusive serpent that does deceive. The subsequent of being without. Is by virtue of I didn't believe.
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Lyrics / Indifference
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Don't show me you heart don't show my your mind. I rather live my life in a dream I rather be blind. Don't tell me your heart don't give me your soul. It's not my need to make you whole. I rather be nothing to me and nothing to be. Indifference it's a shame indifference to the game Don't tell me your dreams don't tell me your lies for I see through your disguise I rather be lonely I rather be alone. Don't make me believe in anything you own. Don't tell me the sun comes when I call I rather be...
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Poetry / None
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Blue skies reflect the phantom clouds Entrance. In peeks and flows my spirit will dance Surrender. In oceans depth embraced Eagerly poisoned breath, blood encased. Darkness of dreams Unspoken in light Time ceases in waves Blinding my sight Silkened sand Consumes my soul Longing for waves That make me whole. In a poisoned Desert A Vulchers mirage will speak of this fantasy I live and love that I seek.
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Poetry / Untitled
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Hagar you ignorant fool, your devils got you on a pedal stool You think you know the Creator well, as you worship in the pit of hell. Esau covered like a beast, from which doctrine do you feast? Selling your birthright for a pot of stew, if only, oh if only you knew. Blind man Blind man, can't you see, The Lord God can set you free. Truth is an angel that holds the keys to loose you from your vanities. When the Master comes what will you say, about the talent you hid away. As you ran in merry...
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Poetry / Gorgeous to me
"Yet" is the only thing I would leave out. The rhyme has a perfect beat and tone. The subject is charming and easy to relate. This would be too good for a hallmark card, but something sentimental would wear this poem proudly.
Poetry / Fit In
in the inside is pride ("on the inside" would read better) It does sound juvenile in topic, lacking some of the needed depth. If this was one of my earlier poems I would rewrite it with the mind of maturity. Yes, it does kill that original creation, however its the substance and evolution that makes the art.
Haiku/Senryu / Grandma, Dachau 1993
Perfect, emotion captured in verse
Horror / He Is Here Again
The shadows from the pictures on the wall cast long reaching for me. (confused wording) maybe "cast long fingers reaching for me" or just a coma after "long" ? Stirring slightly I feel (maybe leave the "feel" out, so its not overused. I begin(or I am feeling) unsettled, restless, as I stirring slightly in an unnatural weight. The short sentences would make for an easier read if they were broken into their own single lines. "I try again. Still I am unable." If you could exchange some of the fe...
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / I Am Woman!
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