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AGE:
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LOC: Leitchfield, KY
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: December 22
LOC: Leitchfield, KY
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: December 22
I am that guy. That guy that never gets too high, that never gets too low. I am that guy that merely goes through life enjoying the bright and sunny days as they come and dealing with the dark ones with they roll through, knowing the sun will shine again. I am that guy…
Actually I am that guy plus more. I am a guy that has always dreamed of publishing a YA novel. A YA novel that will reach just one person and inspire them or change their life in a good way. I am also a soon to be college grad. I am graduating with a degree in English and Social Studies soon (I want to teach), and I hope to use those degrees and my classroom to reach someone, to inspire someone, to change the world. If we all reach out, and inspired just one person, ...
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It was a strange day. I sat there emotionless as others around me wept and mourned. I couldn't help but notice all of the kids from school that showed up, who from what I could remember had never even really talked to Josh or Stephen. Why was it that only in death that the felt obligated to notice them? One of those classmates that showed up was Candace Lee. She actually sat near the reverend for some reason. I recognized the reverend from Stephen's church. I had went with him a few ...
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When my Mother told me there was an accident, I knew that it involved me somehow. I just didn’t know how exactly. The words she mumbled next changed my life. They changed how I perceived life, how I thought about the relevance of life, and most importantly how fragile life really is. With tears in her eyes, she reach across the table and put her hand on mine and told me that Josh and Stephen had been in a car accident and they were both gone. After saying it, she couldn’t fight ba...
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The days were long, and without an air conditioner, they were extremely hot both inside the house and out. I liked to think that the heat was getting me ready for my future in the town mill where most young men ended up after graduation. After all, my father and my two brothers were already employees, so in an essence you could have called it our family business. From an early age I always knew what my future held for me. My dad would ta...
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I blinked my tears away and slowly moved my eyes. Like a massive flower the city unfolded before me. - this is really good. I liked your detail of the arachnoid creature. "I can help you. Look, you're bleeding from your mouth! - not sure you need the exclamation mark This was a really good follow up chapter. I didn't see anything really I would change.
I am not lonely because I share. - maybe looking at replacing share. I don't feel the connection within this line. I am kind because it is needed. - This line sounds to me that you are kind because you have to be. If that is true, leave it, thought maybe in most cases "I am kind because kindness is what I seek" would more mirror the idea behind kindness. Plus you use when needed for responsibility as well I create because I have to. I destroy when I must. - have to and must are the same thing...
He stared straight down the hollowing heights, With her words ringing like screams from quiet nights. -Just a suggestion but, the plural forms here takes away from the emotions from me because they just don't seem to flow well with me. Once again, just a suggestion, but perhaps look at something like "down at the dreadful sight," "like a scream on a quiet night." Just a thought. The courage he called for wouldn’t bring The one step that would finally spring The awaited jump of a boys dream. -...
looking out at the street. - Repetitive, you have already told us he was looking out at the street. Nothing moved out there. - You contradict your self, you have already said that the wind was blowing leaves around. Some cars had hissed passed earlier, some of them he’d recognized, the cars of his neighbours. - Kind of awkward wording here. I would suggest instead of using so many comas to break it up re-word it using just one. I.E. "A few cars had hissed passed earlier, a couple of which he ...
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