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AGE:
16
LOC: Columbia, SC
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: August 02
LOC: Columbia, SC
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: August 02
I’m not really a writer, mainly I just draw… I’m on here to review what my friends write. And I guess I should write something for this account too.
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That happiness, as true as Ptolemy’s view, Who ever knew? That flawless cover, concealing all your weaknesses, Is it something new? You always thought something wasn’t right, Someone always knew. You are one participant in a timeless masquerade, It is nothing new.
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They listened, But didn't hear; They watched, But didn't see; They touched But didn't feel; No one noticed she was breaking, Until she broke.
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How do you explain pearly white gates that are golden?
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"I look at your eyes, distant and foggy. I listen to your voice, directed away from me. I reach out grasping for your attention. You flinch away." ^This is my favorite part The sentence/ paragraph thing is kinda weird though... I think it would look better like this: "Alone in a crowded room, running away from everything. Confronting everyone, sitting there. I look at your eyes, distant and foggy. I listen to your voice, directed away from me. I reach out grasping for your attention. You flin...
Sweet poem, it makes me think of nice dreams. I think it has a nice free flow to it. Have a great day! Rachel
I agree, simple but intense. Some Haikus don't make sense. but this one expresses a complicated topic clearly and simply. ...If that makes any sense. I like it, keep writing! *jealous of your talent...*
I like your style, it flows with out seeming to strictly stick to a rhyme scheme or any other rhyming pattern. So good. The darkness and shadows, sand and waves; I love your imagery style
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