Well I think you have great talent as a writer. Sometimes on here it's hard to get through someones work and leave a review but I didn't find this a hard read at all, even though it is lengthy. The story flows very well and you write very descriptively which helped kept me drawn into the story and what was happening. For some reason I was picturing this as animated instead of live action but that didn't distract me from the story at all. I think possibly the way you write gave me this image. ...

A bit short but an interesting start nonetheless. This looks like you based the story in the future, but on earth or a world of your own, im not sure. I am assuming the characters are human but something has happened and now some humans are mutated in some way. You gave a slight hint of it but didn't actually write what the mutation was, which leaves me wondering what happened and what kind of mutation it is. Is it just a physical disfigurement or does it give the person some sort of powers?(...

This is pretty good since you said English is not your native language. There are a few spelling errors along the way but I think you would find them easy enough if you read through it carefully. I wasn't sure what the whole death thing at the start was about and the wondering kept me reading until I found out in the second paragraph. By the looks of it, it seems the whole assignment to follow the womans husband was a setup so that they could kill him. You have me wondering if there is a grou...

This is a bit different. I don't know if you are religious or not but the girls mom has a messed up idea of how someone religious should live. And her ways of forcing the daughter to do as shes told and scaring her to be good are definently something I haven't heard before. I wouldn't think this a compilation but it could definently be a larger story. Does she keep going back to the man even though he abuses her? Will she turn out like her father and just keep quiet and not even try fighting ...

This story is quite good so far. The prologue is an interesting take on end times although I don't agree with everything that happened. I would suggest reading through this again to find the spelling errors. There weren't many, just a few scattered throughout the story. Also you need to work on sentence structure. Some sentences read awkward and some are just too long. The second sentence is one example. "Light was dimmed by the gloom of sin and hatred, from that sin rose an earthly shadow; f...

Well for starters, the title makes me think of vampires. It doesn't look like there will be any in your story, but slayer makes me think of vamps, might want to keep that in mind. So far it looks like you have a good idea of where the story is going. There are some parts I'm not quite sure about, that reading further would help with, such as the elemental runes and what part they play in the story. I'm assuming they play a part magically in the story, but it would be interesting to see what y...

Well this was an interesting story here. It feels like it could come from something actually happening in your life and you wanted to vent it out in here. Well you certainly got your point across. If this isn't part of your life then you have a very good ability of creating certain feelings between 2 people. Short but with a good amount of emotion. Keep it up.

To be honest I laughed after reading the first sentence. Not because of anything bad but just because something almost exactly like that happens in my story. I was a bit lost since I haven't read the first chapter yet so im not sure why the village was attacked and destroyed and where the main character was so that he didn't get killed also. It sounds like this is supposed to be set in medieval times since you are using words like tavern and the village the character comes to has a gate aroun...

A bit of a different take on the rapture, if thats what you meant this to be. Since there seems to be a few religious things mentioned and Crew will be going to church the next morning, it sounds like the rapture is what actually happened. If it isn't then you did a good job of convincing readers otherwise and will surprise them with whatever you have planned. The only thing I didn't really agree with is when Crew apparently saw Audrey in the bar, but didn't do anything. If they were engaged ...

I think this is quite well written so far. You have a good set of characters with distinct personalities that help to keep them seperate in the story. The only thing I didn't especially like was how you jumped back and forth between the man in the cave and Lauriana's party so early on in the story. I see why you did it but it tends to be a bit confusing when someone has to read two different story's right away in the first chapter of a book. It seems that Lauriana has some sort of powers in t...