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AGE: 20
LOC: Springfield, MO
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 28

My name is Kim. I love music, poetry, and meditation. People are beautiful, in every possible way. I love you. <3

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The Taste of Jealousy She's practically moved in. Her clothes in your kitchen, worn sandals lying beside a faded Bob Marley shirt. Her music on your computer. "Come here" she says "I bet you would like this song." I take another sip of my orange juice staring blankly pretending to listen, and she takes another sip of wine. Its gross you know, the way she has these stars in her eyes looking at me like she's so in love with you, and with each sip of the orange juice i hold in my hand i purse my...
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The windows were crossed with wooden bars, and the glass in between them was spotted with paint and had places that waved instead of being seemless and smooth. It's strange how the windows are what I remember most. I think it's because I drew them, that day that it was raining and we ran into the gallery. The back right corner was your spot. A small desk that was covered in doodles and dreams, and the paintings that contained all of your energy hung on the walls. I crawled up the ladder that ...
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Poetry / Forgive
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Today, i felt the softness of my skin while running my hands under the water. Forming them in the shape of a round cup, I collected the liquid and splashed it on my face, Dispersing memories of the nasty fight. It is me that the water will forgive. It is funny that to forgive someone you must first skin your own problems to the bones and lay your own fight aside. You must be much like the water, constantly flowing, and then you face the fact that nothing in life is yours to cup. I went from t...
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Poetry / take it away
I feel like this...is a start of a poem. The idea had to get out and so you wrote it down, and now its time to expand it. Why should you have been there, and where should you have been? and what makes you worthless? Just because you dont have a care? Or because you dont have somebody to care for you? You see? There is just so much more you could do with this piece and I think that you should go for it. :) <3
Poetry / untitled
I feel like this piece is off to a great start, but i feel like this certainly can not be the finished product...something else has to happen. Its almost like you lead the reader up to this very clamactic stand point...and then just let us off without an ending. I want to hear what her voice sounds like, what words she says...why you are hungry...whats going to happen in the future or...what happened next after you realized that this person fed your hunger? These are all legitemate questions ...
This is a good and powerful piece with a lot of opinion in it, however i think that the rhyme holds it back. There is not a lot of significant imagery in this poem, and not a whole lot of a specific situation, which makes it lack something. Because all a reader gets from this is your frustration, but even that i think is somewhat hidden beneath the rhymes and the lack of specific detail. I think that you could go a lot further with this poem if you picked some specific details about your rela...
I believe that the images are fairly strong in this piece, but I am not sure of its point. If its point is just to be a gentle soothing poem, then I think you have got it. But if you would like to make this strong and something that someone can connect to...then I would suggest perhaps scrapping the rhyme, and putting in more of a real life situation. However, the images are very nice and your rhythm was well executed. *kim*
This is a really interesting piece, but i get a little lost in its meaning. I think just because the dramatic situation is a little vague to me. I get that it is about some kind of loss, and if that is all you were trying to get across then you got it, but i guess there are some things that i would like to see clearer....like....what kind of loss it is. However, i truly do like your images and metaphors. "corpse-still building" is wonderful, and the last stanza is full of bright images that f...
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