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AGE:
22
LOC: Ireland
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: February 22
LOC: Ireland
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: February 22
Well, I’m from Ireland, not far from the capital. I guess life here is generally pretty good, although sometimes I do wish I could get away. I like to think I’m optimistic, but I do admit I am a worrier at times. I tend to go from extreme highs to extreme lows, which suits me fine…just being in the middle confuses me!;) I love reading and writing and music of all kinds. I’m not sure I could have any particular favourites, it all depends on my mood at any particular time.
When I write poems or prose, I tend to just throw it down straight from my head, I don’t really spend time editing. I guess I do like spontaneity, but sometimes it works better than others. I think my main problem is I just don’t know what to do with what I’ve got, o…
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Afraid to scar it's perfect complexion.
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V1: Laugh it up, Make your joke. Side by side We never spoke. Sunshine rain And dirty snow. It's somewhere Comfortable to go. CHORUS: I don't know what I want, But I've got nothing left to say. I'm backing off, but it's been to long. Still I can't find another way. V2: Strike a match Or two, my friend. It burns you at The bitter end. Summer flowers In her hair. I know, I know It isn't fair. CHORUS V3: No one ever came To find me. A stronger scent To remind me. Roll it over I'm feeling rough. ...
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V1: Prick your finger on the point, Kill the flame that burnt the joint. Looking at me, I'm feeling naked, Now I'm wishing that I could fake it. CHORUS: Shaken little cocktail, Thinking I'm gonna fail. I can't handle this, I don't know what to do with it. Someone to stir it up, I wish I didn't give a fuck. I can't handle this, I don't know what to do with it. V2: Blackened eyes and berry grin, Trying to hide where I've been. Tattoo the words around my neck, A mate to corner me in check. CHORU...
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The car pulls over, trees shade the entrance. You know you're nearly home, but you still have that long, dark stretch of road. You're passing people's lives, pissed off by their existance. They never shared your understanding. Their lights hold no promise of safety. Continuing on, your mind wanders. Fear manifests itself. You create footsteps, shadows, anything to justify it's absurdity. Almost there, yet the scene plays out like some cheap thriller. So close to home, but it's too late! No! Y...
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A world of sepia seen through eyes still squinted. The golden rains smoothly smothering my waiting skin with gentle kisses. The soft snow of early summer floats slowly and lazily all around, And the soothing hum of busy bodies drifts by as they steal some sweetness for their queen. Ears are filled with the flutter of many tiny wings as the feathered choir moves from hall to harmonious hall. Sweet scents from pretty petals suggest summers intent- Long and lazy days of sensuous surroundings. Th...
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I think I can see what you're saying...that's how I feel about writing sometimes too. You could have a whole mass of ideas, but the final product can only be seen once you've hacked away all the excess. I'm not sure how well the cement works, artistically speaking you wouldn't really carve cement. Apart from that I like it though. The full stops work well. I'm not sure this should be in with poetry though... maybe the quotations section would suit it better. Nice though!
Okay, so to begin with, I realise you are a beginner at writing poetry, that's okay, everyone starts somewhere and I think it's a great idea to get your work out there from the word go so you can pick up constructive criticism and advice early on. I like the idea for this poem and I certainly think you're on to something, it just needs some work. Your use of alliteration with the 's' sounds, (stressed, pace, race), is good, but I think you could do more with it, try and find a better flow or ...
as a cat lover how could i not enjoy this! some lovely sentiments and descriptions, and i certainly agree with the last line!
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