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LOC: Pine Island, NY
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LAST LOGIN: September 22
LOC: Pine Island, NY
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 22
I’m Tyler , I’m 16. Love writing, reading , and music. ask me if u wanna know anything else
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The moon stands alone among the dark sky in spite. All the stars have long since burned away tonight. The lost souls wander the dark trails in vain. Under the meager moonlight and pounding rain. Deadly silence rules the land. The Reaper King scythe in hand. People tired of death and despair, Wish to rid the land of this foul air. Dark clouds have blocked the sun. Many dark deeds this king has done. He has the darkest past of all. He sold his soul now curses call. The people wish to see the li...
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Simple words as sharp as knives are cutting into me again. A pain with I am too familiar. Guilt consumes me as words become a blur. The memories of past mistakes are beginning to surround me. Drowning in this sea of lies my world becomes so dark. I'm alone in this bitter cold. I thought I found salvation in you. I thought you were my light to guide but that light has no been stilled. And my heart has been broken. So many pieces now gone Shattered and scattered by your betrayal. I'm never mend...
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I am lying in my bed , Fighting of the demons of sleep, Thinking of you aching for you, The blood pumps from my heart, A heart that belongs to you, I need you by my side, I love you with a passion, Anything I will do for you, Nothing is to much, I’d give you anything If I had something left .
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My hatred is an eternal flame Burning brightly Engulfing all that is near The embers licking and melting your skin The flames rage Spreading quickly I fear it can no longer be contained You handled yourself flawlessly till now Your first and last mistake was crossing me
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The Light Flickers Out, And I'm All Alone, I'm Losing My Mind Or Just About. Surrounded by these cold walls of stone is this where i meet my end ? I Scream into the Dark As my Mind Twists and Bends The light is back on , back to the start.
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They continued in their search, looking at a variety of creatures from many different lands, but they could find no answers to Claudia’s perplexing questions about who whe was and where she came from. i think you meant to say she, not whe. Praises of his greatmess are still sung to this day. i think you meant to say greatness taking my advanced history class on a field trip to a rennaissance faire. renaissance is correct She didn’t have a renaissance costume, but she didn’t think it would ma...
In the first line you have arrogant spelled arrogrant. From Alexandria, Eratosthenes, along with an entourage of peers, scholars, and students, travelled south up the gentle Nile with the merchant’s caravan of camels, arriving in Syene a day before the summer solstice. traveled is spelled incorrectly. Truth, afterall, was that which is believed. after all is two words. “What’s so funny?” she said with irritation gravelling her usually chipper voice. graveling is the correct spelling. The cont...
I think that you have done a very good job here overall. "In the morning, when I wake up," In that line i don't think you need the comma after morning but then again it all depends on how you read the line. In the second to last line I'm should be capitalized. you put your peas inside your shirt” There is no ending punctuation on this line. Other than that it was a very good read.
Well written i like your style. i like the multiple rhymes in one line. i think that the second line needs to be changed a little bit the first part of it doesn't seem to flow right.
simply amazing , i loved every line . it seems a lot less confusing except i did find this line to be confusing to me still "But daylight is breaking and making it burn in the depths of hell seems so inviting." but other than that a great poem and i love what its about . this was one of my favorites.
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