Excellent comparison of his lover and a castle. Writer acknowledges that love is not perfect yet he will stand by his love. Excellent read. Invigorating to the heart. Hs expresses tenacity for his relationship.

Interesting work. The reader takes you on a journey to hell. "devils arithmetic, you fuckin make me sick" I am assuming that this poem is discussing the love hate relationship that he has with his tormentor. "Life equals 666" definitely the numbers associated with the devil. Details very clear and captivating . Very interesting work that sticks out among the others that I have read on this site. It makes you think.

Very beautiful very beautiful piece. I loved this because that this is such a reality in the world. Realistic setting, full of real emotion, real soul, real loneliness, a very real dream.

Straight and to the point. I agree with that you should dig deeper with this piece. But nontheless it is a good piece.

I am the biggest fan of truthspoken. Great ending to go with a great beginning. Refreshing poem.

Beautifully written. Keep working to better your craft. Good read.

this writing is a true affirmation of love and lust at first sight. The characters in this writing become real because of the excellent mental picture that is painted by the writer. Jason is a real life person to alot of us ladies so the description of him was refreshing. Matt is the man that we all wait for. Interesting piece. Good reading.

A good read that relives memories with grandfather. Makes the hospital a real place in the mind. A very interesting read. Not the typical essay. This is not something that most people write about. Strong setting that hold s its own.

You definitely painted a vivid and clear picture for the reader. This story is intriguing beginning with the first line. It appears that you set out to create a time and place in the readers imagination that would not be forgotten. Cudos.