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AGE: 26
LOC: Champaign, IL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: January 10

I have always wanted to wrtie despite what I percieve as a lack of natural talent.  I love to engage life and value of all the experiences I encounter.  I know the above statement can be somewhat cliche.  I also have a high need for stimulation.  

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Short Story / The Great Home Escape
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Dear Neighbor, I presume you are somewhat new to the neighborhood as I see the house you live in constantly has a for-sale sign upon its lawn.  And though you yourself had also had one, I am convinced that after a short period in the house you too have decided to abandon ship.  I find no fault in you doing this, and in fact I believe it is a commonality we both share.  Nevertheless this story is not about you, nor my presumptions about you.  It is about me and the adventur...
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Novel Treatments / Attracted to a Trampstamp
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IV Asking out Her name was Rebecca and we had exchanged glances multiple times in our speech class, and eventually I had mustered up the courage to smile at her. She was cute, blonde, about 5’5”, and she even seemed halfway intelligent. I wanted to ask her out, but exchanging smiles with her in class had been hard enough. For the first few classes of that semester I chose to reason out my insecurity by convincing myself that the likelihood of her being a bitch was quite high, and that I was m...
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Short Story / Attracted to a Tramp
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Her name was Beth and we had exchanged glances multiple times in our speech class, and eventually I had mustered up the courage to smile at her. She was cute, blonde, about 5’5”, and she even seemed halfway intelligent. I wanted to ask her out, but exchanging smiles with her in class had been hard enough. For the first few classes of that semester I chose to reason out my insecurity in asking her out by convincing myself that the likelihood of her being a bitch was quite high, and that I was ...
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Horror / It felt good
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It felt good. It felt good to have my palm wrapped around the handle, and my index finger firmly holding the trigger. I knew that it was unloaded, but nonetheless I felt a sense of power. In my hands I held a machine that was capable of destroying a life. With the pull of one finger I had the power to make a decision on who would live and who would die. Granted I would have to aim it correctly and pull it before someone did the same to me. It was my first time holding any real gun, much less...
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Horror / It felt good
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It felt good. It felt good to have my palm wrapped around the handle, and my index finger firmly holding the trigger. I knew that it was unloaded, but nonetheless I felt a sense of power. In my hands I held a machine that was capable of destroying a life. With the pull of one finger I had the power to make a decision on who would live and who would die. Granted I would have to aim it correctly and pull it before someone did the same to me. Anyway it was my first time holding any real gun, mu...
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Short Story / Keys
I like the story and I can feel the narrator's angst the whole way through. Good job conveying emotion. The part you tell the reader it wasn't easy for your step-mom due to her size made me laugh. The last sentence could be reordered so that you don't need to use parenthesis. "poking me in the thigh right that moment"- get rid -right that moment- the reader recognizes that it is happening currently.
Novel Treatments / Sunsets on an English Moor
Content wise I enjoy this piece and found myself actually seeing the things you were describing. I like that you chose third person as I think it is most appropriate. The beginning was sort of weak, and I think the first paragraph needs to be rewritten. I found that in the first quarter you used some unnecessary description that slowed the flow of the piece down. Reread it and remove anything that does not add meaning to the piece. I included a few examples below. The rest of the piece was st...
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Overall I found your piece to be informative and a straight forward read. For the most part it is clear, but there are several areas that could be cleaned up, and I suspect reading it out loud may help. Also I feel that it was much heavier in research regarding the anti-ecstasy point of view yet you then support a view to lessen the classification of the drug. It is as if you lost some steam towards the end. I think the paper is well written but I would like to see you tighten up your argumen...
Short Story / You Hum
I love the emotional tone that you set, and how you describe the complexity of the character's feelings. This piece is very artistic and it is hard to comment on much since much of it is personal preference. The one thing I wish you had done is allude more to the fact that the character is in a fight. I kept guessing as to why he was feeling the emotions. Overall it was a pleasure to read and I am glad your unapologetic for it.
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