All I can say is well done. It should be longer because I want to know why the urgency.

This is good. I really like it. My only complaint is that it is a bit confusing. I would like a bit more description of who these characters are so that I can get a feel for them. Keep it up this is good.

Not sure what you are looking for. If its already been published, then why us? Its good. Keep it up.

I enjoyed this and if you tone it up a bit with more explanations it will be even better. For example, what made you sick? Give details on what that experience was like cause most of your readers haven't had that experience. Explain more of you and your dad's link and the other aspects of your "gift". I'm not a believer in such things, but I love ghost stories. I have had the similar experiences as yourself from the time I was 5 to bout 11 when i said no more of this and that was that for the...

I love it. I like the way it flows. I can't find anything that I would change about it. I would like a title though.lol The only part that I find a little out of place is the "he smiles...." you smile. one could argue that the word smile is used to much, but I like it regardless.

Its good and with a revision it will be realy good. The first stanza is nice. It has a good flow and its easy to understand. The second stanza is the one that needs a bit of work. The phrase pitch black is used to often. Find words that will represent the meaning of pitch black and use those in place of pitch black all the time. Secondly, the line when you are speaking about nightmares and sweet dreams is a little confusing. Thirdly, the ending is great. I love the fact that you too will slip...

The structure is different and I like what you did with it. I know I am supposed to be constructive, but I can't recommend anything that should be done differently. I can recommend that you don't need the very last sentence. Its a pointless one and drags down the stanza. I like the poem.except the "diarrhoea" part. lol

I love it and I wouldn't change a thing about it. Wish I would have thought to write something like this myself.

I like the style. Its different and the imagery is very unique which is a plus for me. However without the title I would have no idea what you were talking about. I would love to see more stanzas like this. Expand this poem. Very different and i love that.

I like it and can't find anything wrong with it except the word now in line 11. It seems to take away from the flow. keep it up.