there are a couple of incomplete sentences, and a few that dont make sense, like: "We moved here from Charleston for this plantation" if you're going for perfection, i'd try to re-read, and rethink a few lines. good luck though!

i liked this, just the last verse is shaky, it makes sense, but the rhythm is interrupted, or something. i think there are too many commas.

i think there needs to be one more or one less line in here, it ends abruptly.

dont know if your trying to be rhymey but look over "been and eighteen" swim and whirlwind are close.

i dont get the flow of this..it seems kind of incomplete.