The only flaws in your story are minor such as forgetting to add quotation marks and periods. The story flowed well and the characters were three dimensional.

Very profound and well written about a terrible involvement America is in. Good job and keep up the good work.

you have a creative flair in your poem by mixing body parts with the ocean. Keep up the good work

Very creative to write a poem from a child's point of view. Furthermore, very insightful to highlight the human's inner struggle of whether to create or to destroy.

A sign of a great piece of work is when the audience hungers for more and right now I am hungry to read more of this piece. The two pages flowed well with awesome imagery and excellent grammar. Well done! Is there more to this story?

I am honestly not being negative nor dense but where is the submission?

The imagery is awesome in this submission because it shows the all powerful sun hampered by something simple as clouds. The simple flower is shone as being brave enough to extend itself out into the open, unafraid of the sun's might

This is one of the best poems I have ever read. The point of view taken from the narrator describing how their life has changed since their significant other was simply awesome. Keep up the good work

Your submission is written really well with such frank details of what a teenage runaway might feel and experience. Your story flowed superbly. I cannot find any errors or make suggestions for improvement of a story that is already fantastic. Keep up the excellent work.

I was only able to get to the 6th page due to pressing family commitments but what I have so far read was excellent especially with using jump speed coordinates, planet destinations and sentient beings as allies. I thoroughly enjoy sci-fi. Keep up the good work!