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AGE: 18
LOC: Loves Park, IL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 15

“Heaven’s not a place that you go when you die
It’s that moment in life when you actually feel alive
So live for the moment
and take this advice, live by every word
Love is just a hoax so forget anything that you have heard
and live for the moment now,”

~ The Spill Canvas – ‘The Tide’

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Walking underneath A canopy of green Is where I do My best thinking. Rays of sunshine Light on the leaves And seem to trickle hope Into my faltering beliefs. But then the thought is lost And I amble on my way, Wishing I could think up The perfect words to say. Twinkling diamonds in the sky All trying to catch my eye As my soul stretches out, Reaches for the flames Dancing and burning Thousands of light years away Asking for an answer Or the flicker of a sign To solve the age old questions Tha...
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It's cancer of the worst kind That eats away at your grieving mind Why can't you be happy? Why can't you love me? When you is all I ever wanted you to be? If I love you this much To move on just for you Then why can't you see that my love is true? Maybe it'll happen for us someday When we've grown On our own And in different ways. But it hurts to know That I can't stop you And that we may never be again What we once were Because of the decision you made.
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The morning sun Peeks into my room But I don't open my eyes Want to sleep Want to dream So it can be as it seems My reality. But it can't And never could be It seems you have still left me And I go back to living One hour at a time So I don't lose my mind Praying throughout the day That you'll change And want me too I sink into despair And hopelessness drowns my heart Killing me over and over again And you won't save me Because single makes you happy And I can't change that.
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Poetry / Too Late
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One minute you're here The next you're gone Not knowing if I'm Holding on too strong Or too long for you To stick by me true Eventually we'll be But for now we're apart And it's driving me crazy And shoving needles through my heart My most protected body part But not well enough If losing you can be this hard Now I'm picking up every shard Every piece of my broken heart Which shattered like glass And keeps crumbling still Even though you don't see it Instead stick to your guns And hope when y...
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Poetry / Two Parts
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Everything I hear or see every car door slamming every squeaking, creaking door every pair of headlights every ring of my phone every voice calling my name evey footstep... I wish it was you And as the seconds pass My heart beats really fast But my eyes become like glass As I realize it's not you Is never you... Won't ever be you... Until you realize that we're meant to be two Parts of the same whole One so beautiful and bold The world pales in comparison
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I think that your writing would be more effective if you used more descriptive words. Right now, the speaker of your poem is telling us what happened and describing it with verbs, and for the most part it's pretty... unemotional. You could try adding adjectives to excite your readers' senses by telling us how the man's flesh tastes to himself, the texture of the parts of his body that he's eating, etc... You have pretty good visual stimulators already, but how about adding some colors or othe...
Poetry / Goodbye Grandma
This reminded me of my great-grandma, who my family lost back in 2001. I love how your son has described the memory of someone through the scents that we associate with them. Visual memory can be deceitful, but smells often awaken memories that we don't know we have. I also enjoyed the way he captured the care-free spirit of a small child who does not understand the meaning of death. This poem is something that many, if not all people can relate to. It's amazing and graceful in its flow. Than...
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I'm sure that every teacher has had times and classes like this! It makes me think of the teachers who always tried so hard, but never really got anywhere with their students. I was definitely the one student who told everyone to pay attention, hehe! I like the use of stream-of-consciousness writing and I like that you really don't have a rhyme scheme. I find it a bit ironic that a poem where the speaker is a teacher doesn't fit the normal routine poetry. You definitely acheived your goal of ...
Poetry / Odds in favor.
This is adorable! I really like how you've taken the awkwardness of falling in love and described it with mathematical terms. This is somewhere that we've all been before. It's the, 'should I or should I let them?' moment. At least, that's how it felt to me. Instead of a comma after the word 'kissing' in the third line, maybe try the feel of an elipsis in its place. An elipsis would lengthen the natural pause at the end of the line and add a touch of uncertainty to the rhythm. It's just a tho...