This is hilarious! i love it!

I enjoyed this work, although some of it I found to be cliche, but I feel it works at the same time. I especially enjoy lines such as "your look different under the light of a lie" I feel like I could see that flowing well in a song. I also love this imagery found in these lines: "i’m drawing the arrows from all sides. the bulls eye is just this place my heart used to reside. before i gave it away to a girl with good (but never honest) intentions. i’m tainted on love, but longing for somethin...

I enjoyed this work, and I feel that the use of morning in the beginning is not too much. Repeating words can have add even more meaning to the work. I especially like the use of punctuation in the following lines: "I was beautiful with my rosey colored nose and cheeks. I was vibrant with labored breathing from climbing four flights of stairs. I was an adventurer braving the black, cloudy, frigid morning. I was a romantic.. staring at the sky." For some reason the use of no commas to commas t...

I find this quote to be very real. It may seem simple, but it is so true to the point where it makes sense to me. I don't know why, but it seems to have more meaning then just the straight forward one.

I love the use of quotes in this work. Although some lines are typical, there are some lines that struck me. "“Friend” is something more and something less than “lover” as the whim takes you." This is true and tragic statement of how one can be a friend, but to be a lover it takes more..and it's not necessarily all the time. I think we have all been in those types of situations before. The person in this poem seems to be at the mercy of everyone around him or her. I enjoyed this work, I hope ...

I admire this piece. As a writer I have never been able to master sonnets. I think this works well with the subject matter, and has the innocent feel of looking and caring for a stranger. I especially like this line: "She’s in the tide, I don’t dare try to save"

I absolutely love, i guess it would be called, play on words here. The celebrity references are great, I love how you use them. "where their banners carry the headline: ‘Catherines Eat A Jones’. While the loneliest buoy on the beach sits weeping in a sand dune reminiscing of the sea and dreaming of its bob hope." I am just wondering if you meant to not capitalize Bob's name, does that have any significance? I love the use of repetition. I think it works, since in the world of famous people, i...

I enjoyed the flow of this piece. I could definitely see this transform into a song. i love the images that come to my mind. I especially love this image: " holding the pages of a story of man after his time, tried and calloused from holding on too tight, to the vision of a blind man who could lead you to the light"

I love how refreshing this is. Although it is seemingly a common topic of love you use imagery to display it in a delightful way despite the underlining sadness that I can feel through your words. This piece has this evolving sense of comfort through your words that I adore. I could see this evolving into lyrics.

I think these six words can define a person at every milestone in their life. As humans we look back to see what we should of...even could of done differently. I think this captures a mentality held by a lot of people. Although it may seem cliche, I think it fits more than I can express.