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So clever - Except when it counts
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I live through dreams - in ink
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Poetry / Gypsy
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Once I traveled to a far off place Just to see what I could see Wondering what in this moving world Would ever become of me And as I wandered, I stopped upon A darkly night robed street The kind of place where you never know Who or what you’ll meet And as I stood in the shadows deep A woman came to me Trailing sights from the future fair Asking if I wanted to see And as I stood I wondered brief Would I want to see? Would I believe the future fair, If she showed it to me? She whispered soft in...
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Poetry / Don't Answer Me
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I find myself, back turned, Listening to the rustle of your leaving One last glance brushes Across the back of my neck, as if You’d actually touched me. A ritual we have devised No fears, no breath, no goodbyes No final words, not even Temporary ones to bide us until The next time that we meet. I can feel you, hovering, Wanting so to whisper something But wanting no words To lie between us should we never Meet again. Turning my head, I smile A soft, gentle goodbye, spoken with The only langua...
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Poetry / Dreamweaver
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I’ve seen the eyes of the darkest night And felt its eerie breath The sliding touch of its too cold hands Has brought me close to death But in the arms of these nightmare nights I find the most perfect dreams Joy and pain and love and delight But nothing is quite what it seems Dreaming soft and dreaming sweet I stumble in my sleep And all my dreams become my life And I’m captured somewhere deep Somewhere far in the distance I catch a glimpse of the man The one who knows what our dreams are An...
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Short Story / isaac
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Poetry / Capital Eyes
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Poetry / Distortion
Excellent word choice! I liked the rhymes, the short, concise lines, and the words you choose are sharp and perfect! I really liked the "red walls as i fall", but was less thrilled with the "feet slip slide in the flood" stanza. It seemed a bit less special - kind of like it wasn't a perfect fit like the other lines. It may just be where it was longer than the others, and that threw the flow off a bit for me. Overall, an excellent piece. I'd love to read more!!!
Poetry / The Box
Excellent. I did have one problem. Do you mean the key you wielded? Wheeled makes no sense whatsoever. If that was intentional, I missed the reason behind it. If not, you may want to be more careful about editing. I loved your flow, and the structure, and your word choice was spot on. I can't wait to read more!
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Raven
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Finder's Fee

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