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So clever - Except when it counts
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I live through dreams - in ink
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Poetry / Gypsy
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Once I traveled to a far off place Just to see what I could see Wondering what in this moving world Would ever become of me And as I wandered, I stopped upon A darkly night robed street The kind of place where you never know Who or what you’ll meet And as I stood in the shadows deep A woman came to me Trailing sights from the future fair Asking if I wanted to see And as I stood I wondered brief Would I want to see? Would I believe the future fair, If she showed it to me? She whispered soft in...
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Poetry / Don't Answer Me
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I find myself, back turned, Listening to the rustle of your leaving One last glance brushes Across the back of my neck, as if You’d actually touched me. A ritual we have devised No fears, no breath, no goodbyes No final words, not even Temporary ones to bide us until The next time that we meet. I can feel you, hovering, Wanting so to whisper something But wanting no words To lie between us should we never Meet again. Turning my head, I smile A soft, gentle goodbye, spoken with The only langua...
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Poetry / Dreamweaver
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I’ve seen the eyes of the darkest night And felt its eerie breath The sliding touch of its too cold hands Has brought me close to death But in the arms of these nightmare nights I find the most perfect dreams Joy and pain and love and delight But nothing is quite what it seems Dreaming soft and dreaming sweet I stumble in my sleep And all my dreams become my life And I’m captured somewhere deep Somewhere far in the distance I catch a glimpse of the man The one who knows what our dreams are An...
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Poetry / Broken Glass
I don't really think you need the word Emotionally at the beginning. I think most people are going to know you don't mean the poem literally. I think taking that and the one closer to the end out - "Because emotionally..." - will make it a much stronger piece. Also, the first stanza (not including the first word) is sharp and descriptive. Your second stanza isn't. This stanza is weak, not strong, and doesn't follow the format of the others at all. Where's the list of three in the last line on...
Poetry / Why Is It?
Apparently, it is so hard. If there's one thing I'm a big believer in, it's self responsibility and tolerance. You and I are obviously two of a very small number that seem to even know what the word tolerance means. Excellent job at bringing this to light. Your tone is not preachy, just questioning. I like your form, and your word choice is right on. Maybe someone who reads this will really pay attention. :)
Short Story / A Dollar for Hemingway
This is outstanding! I love this! The way you bring inanimate objects to life and give them actual dialog is perfect. Your word choice is clear and sharp and makes for a wonderfully interesting tale. I only have a couple of nitpicks: "While Tommy’s sighs where slow and easy sighs of the content...." What? Do you mean sighs of content? If not, what content? Darn those double meaning words! :) "...greatest of efforts..." This should just be effort. "They were a vast intake of air through a slim...
Short Story / A Masquerade in Sequins
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Outstanding. This is great. It is precise, succinct, and wry. I like anything that gets me to chuckle - especially if I'm not expecting it. I have no criticism.
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