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I'm torn whether to laud the lack of punctuation or to rebel against it. Without the punctuation, meaning is mutable. On one hand this is a good thing; I love when it is highlighted that meanings and interpretations can change with the reader. My hang up is whether this ambiguity is deliberate or a product of willful ignorance. In any case, I like the conceit of the moon as a reflection of life, perhaps that of all humanity. This poem would certainly make for interesting discussion in an Engl...

I like that you use the title-space to best effect. I feel that it adds an interesting dimension to the meaning of your haiku. I also like that there is a shift or turning of mood or expectation that mimics the traditional Japanese form. Also the use of punctuation highlights and emphasizes the "hesitation." Overall, this is a great haiku, for its compact impact. Keep on keeping on!

Well, aren't you the prolific reviewer! Thank you, on behalf of other reviewers, for contributing to the haiku possibilities. If haiku writers thought that there was nothing left to write, I guess you've proven them wrong. On a side note, I like how the internal rhyme adds to/changes up the rhythm of the piece. What's next?

What an interesting take on babies! I have been struck by the same observation before--that they resemble Japanese Buddhas. I like how you were able to use this in haiku form. There isn't a real surprise "twist" as associated with other haiku, but I do like the last line for it's provocativeness, thoughtfulness. So, thanks for posting this, your "First attempt at a haiku." It is a wise, astute observation in a very minimalist form. I'll be sure to remember it every time I encounter babies!

Assuming that the misspellings are intentional, I think that this haiku is very nice and sarcastic. It can be taken as an indictment on (a) religion's "alterations" of Truth. Also "engraven" calls to mind "graven," where "engraved" would be just a simple description of the imagery common in some churches. Truly, if you chose these words, this haiku is a very subtle (all the more powerful) poem. Also looking at your title, "Thou Shalt Not," makes me think that you did mean it to be taken in a ...