Well first let me say the beginning started out really slow and boring. Just a lot of words. I think what could help if you would have been a little more descriptive with the characters. Told me more about their appearence so i could have got a better feeling of who I were dealing with make the characters come alive for to the readers. right at the beginning. that way you caputre the attention of the reader immediately. You did mention one thing that she was a demure woman, but that was all I...

This reminds me of an episode of law and order. You have great writng skills, but you need to make the charcters a little more different/creative. To make it seem totally different from any crime story ever written. Yea different means better. It captures, keeps the readers attention and makes the story more interesting. Which makes for a exciting, and pleasurable read. Take your time when writing then your creative juices will flow. I like different it shows more creativity. try to be a litt...

It was a great story, it was very creative. It kept my attention the hold time. It was thought provoking, good job.

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My Sentiments exactly, people really need to stop passing judgements. they missing out on knowing great people.

This story is more of action/ thriller. It kept my interest the whole time the writng is excellent. a lot of thought and hard work I can tell went into this story. I really like when people can expand with there imagination it make for a better read. you did a good job.

This version was much better, it seem like you took your time and let your creative juices flow. much better.

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I thought this was an interseting read. I like how you used your descriptive creativity, when describing the room and its contents. Then it got kinda eree, when you wrote how you had written in the tablet and there was nothing there. That made me want to read futher. I must say I have had dreams that seem so real. It seems like you were jumping around a bit. But you may needed to do that do to the fact that it was about different dreams, not just one . I liked it very much. Good Luck!

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