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LOC: Lake City, PA
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Poetry / Harshest Critic
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Harshest Critic Unfortunate, isn’t it, to say the least, that so much of our self-worth is merely from reflected perception? Our ego-beast, clearly orphaned at birth either whimpers or roars in reflexive response to the touch it craves. ~~~~~~~~~~ The poet raves glory-green sings the sun and bleeds blue, he knows, he sees, he reads the world and writes the soul. Addict! He needs to scribble verse, to grasp and hurl right words from out of darkness, seeking light, to wrestle truth, to purse li...
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"All rework and no ploy makes Hamlet a dull play"
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Haiku/Senryu / post storm
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wind-berated trees stand in rumpled compliance like chastised children
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Cleopatra’s Mirror I must be more than this image of kohl-eyed copper allows. This face is too plain this head too Greek this neck too slender too weak to bear a crown heavy with the weight of two lands. I must be more than I can glean from polished metal. What hands as fine as these could build a throne upon the brother-husband’s blood and bone? Or breasts so common suckle a nation?
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Poetry / I Am Autumn
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I Am Autumn Please understand that you will not find in me- more than a misty moment of spring. that promise gone, as it must be- it’s honeyed taste, still a sweet remembered thing. Likewise, the summer of my life has come and gone- the days of budding fruit and learning lips- when flowers knew their glory and my body danced along- to shared music with easy-rolling hips. You have come to me in Autumn-time. My form is round and unashamed, a woman grown. I offer you the flame-leafed fullness of...
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Poetry / Untitled
Your poem deserves praise certainly, for it's clarity of meaning. The reader is not left with a puzzled expression as is often the case after reading a piece with elaborate vocabulary and obscure, code-like content. The flow and metre is also fine, though it does come perilously close to sing-song. For the most part, your word choices and rhyme scheme are quite nice too-- with the possible exception of stanza three, which seems a bit forced due to the use of the word strife, which doesn't see...
Lyrics / "FOREVER"
Ok, I see where you are going with this, and I like the general feel of the piece. There are some lovely ideas here, and some pretty good lines. Your poem has good bones, but there are problems. There are some awkward hiccups in the rhythm due to a few of your word choices, there are also some words which seem simply out of place in a serious poem, and some which are too often needlessly repeated, (we know this is a poem about love, but the word love is over-used in it). Your poem could use s...
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Honest, emotional, passionate and perfectly related tale of waste, revelation, change and hope. I felt this one in my gut. I can't find anything to even criticise. It's that good. Wish I had written this---that's my highest praise--- smiles, toes
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Haiku/Senryu / post storm
Poetry / Be still.

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