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I like how you are describing things in your story. It really helps me visualize what's happening When you have the sentence, "I am all hair and eyes..." revise that. It sounds odd. I love how you describe the tree's branches as if having respect for the wind! It's absolutely brilliant!

this was kind of disturbing. haha. It was good none the less. I suggest you make it a little less disturbing though. It would attrct more readers

This is neat. I didn't find any errors in it. so good job. I'd love to read more

That was good. I liked how you used people in poetry, unlike many others