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AGE: 25
LOC: Wilton, CT
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: January 24

I write both poetry and (often poetic) philosophical prose.   These for me are two aspects of my larger self process as a writer and thinker, and they play themselves out in each other.
I am interested in semiotics and the way that a piece of art can assume multiple diverse meanings and interpretations in the hands of different readers, different cultures and life histories.
I like to play around with different levels of ambiguity and concreteness, but at present I tend to be on the more ambiguous side. I do not look to make all of my meanings clear or discursive.  
My meanings are very rarely clear-cut. They never can be fully translated to a direct or discursive summary, although I can often interpret and make background and  sta…

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Poetry / Emergence
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Phantom nights permit no oversight. Ice-moon-wind creeps through all fabric. The sun has not slept in weeks. In these tracts, however, everything is high-contrast: the impact of closer light, giant white pines falling on blackened carpets gratuitous wildflowers, glass creeks, snow slouching into astute lakes, the unswerving arrogance of the mountains— in these tracts everything is emergent ecstatic and balmy from the long metropolitan wilderness, impossible gradients appear with ligaments rus...
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Flames struggle, flower, and in consuming time must die. We humans grow gradually deranged in the magnitude of the passing. We decide to search for forests for kindling and for frost. Confounded we watch with wildfires’ brittle brevity the smoke of ourselves circulating the fragility of flames happening.
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This instant tastes like wormwood, scrap metal, perspiration, latex gloves, stale cookies, boxed wine, aluminum foil, petroleum vapors, your honest forehead, the refrigerator’s insides, the salt of your back, worn-out gestures, your blooming indifference, pavement, gravity, beauty, clean wind, green apples, the heavy future, the expansive horizon, peace, soil, & living on.
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Trembling with the thorny letters of my knowledge I hesitated to push those loaded signs through my esophagus, to lay their slimy points over the soundscapes and the medical counters (the ones that you sterilized expressly for me.) I knew there wasn’t much time left, and I wanted to wait alone with the long scars of the truth rising undead through my throat, alone with the results of my internal interrogations, alone to determine what to do next.
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In jest the summits toss reckless torrents of clouds in the new air, the shadows like maps horsing around on their flanks in jest the summits squirm and are sealed beneath the unquiet footsteps of the people. in jest the summits break themselves down, aeon upon aeon break themselves into fractions a dwarfing erosion a violent peace overflowing. and racing downwards before the lightning strikes, rumors of the speed of wind ignite over darkening worlds. the summits exhale and laugh in their sle...
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Poetry / Company
The poem has a strong beginning, but it weakens and loses vigor towards the end. I think the strongest stanza is the first, I like the idea of the child at play, and it would be in your best interest to develop this image more. The last stanza is your weakness, because it's clear that you do in fact need others (as a human, and in your poem's obvious need for others). The image of the person waiting at the window for years is pretty overdramatic and would be improved if the person had been wa...
Haiku/Senryu / Autumn's Sister
Beautiful, original, dynamic and fascinating. Haiku doesn't normally hold too much interest for me, but I think that your word choices work to attract interest for the reader. My favorite part is the "lost seeds;" it leaves an air of potential metaphor and mystery. I think this piece would be nice as part of a larger series of haikus. I like your description of what the poem is about, but I don't think it's necessary-- the poem holds its own. Good job.
Poetry / Baggage
Locked
Overall I think this is a very strong piece, but it needs some minor editing and polishing. Your central metaphor is a strong one, something to which many writers could relate. It is made clear primarily by the title, although there are gestures towards it in the rest of the poem. The rapist-armed robber side of the metaphor is very developed in the poem, but the muse side could stand to be developed a little bit more so that the structure of the comparison becomes more visible. The strongest...
Poetry / Gratitude
This is really kind of forceful. You have added a lot of very strong images and stories, and I like them. The stories of the individuals are my favorite. Several of the lines are excellent; others are a bit weaker and some are a bit too short. My main suggestion is to break up the poem into multiple poems. They can be multiple poems that belong together, or a series. I really would start out with the stories. I love the way you tell these individual stories, but I think it would be better if ...