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AGE:
19
LOC: Mcminnville, OR
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 08
LOC: Mcminnville, OR
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 08
Hey, thanks for looking me up. My name is Chris and I am currently in college. Writing has been a hobby of mine since I was a little kid. I started out doing silly stories that only a 3rd grader could think of, and that progressed to narrative poetry in Junior High and then later to short stories, more poetry, musical lyrics, as well as two novels in progress.
I have had a handful of poems published in the last several years as well as two short stories of mine. I have not had anything published recently as I am not really looking to “get out there” as they say. Those that were published were flukes, a publisher/editor happened upon some of my work and came to me and had some of my things published.
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“I was five years old when my parents took me to my first piano lesson. I was as excited as any five year old could get about something. My parents really worked hard for the money to pay for my lessons each month, often going without so that I might continue learning. In third grade I picked up the violin for the first time. I played it with nearly as much passion as I did the piano. My music teachers saw in me great potential and guided me well as I grew in my skill. My teachers and parents...
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“I was five years old when my parents took me to my first piano lesson. I was as excited as any five year old could get about something. My parents really worked hard for the money to pay for my lessons each month, often going without so that I might continue learning. In third grade I picked up the violin for the first time. I played it with nearly as much passion as I did the piano. My music teachers saw in me great potential and guided me well as I grew in my skill. My teachers and parents...
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“I was five years old when my parents took me to my first piano lesson. I was as excited as any five year old could get about something. My parents really worked hard for the money for my lessons each month, often going without some items so that I might continue my learning. In third grade I picked up the violin for the first time. I played the violin with nearly as much passion as I did the piano. My music teachers saw in me great potential and guided me well as I grew in my skill. My teach...
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The wind rushed through Winter’s hair as she stood on the prow of the yacht, her silver hair shimmering and glistening in the afternoon sun, as well as from the spay of the ocean. She took a deep breath as she leaned on the railing, leaning out as far as she could. The hood of her sweater was hanging down her back and was partially unzipped, the pink of the shirt underneath showing through. The sun was beaming down on the water and reflecting back up into her pale skin, warming the surface of...
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I promise to be there When your heart is torn. I promise to be there When the sparkle leaves your eyes, When your dreams are falling to the floor I promise to be there I promise to tread so carefully As I walk in through the door. I wrap my arms around you, I pull your body close, I whisper gently in your ears As I tell you that I love you. Quietly you cry in my arms, Quietly you shake in my arms, Quietly I hold you I take your tears away. Quietly I hold you As I hug your fears away.
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That was well written. I liked reading it. It seemed a little bit long though, and sometimes it seemed less poetry and more just your own thoughts. I dont think I would suggest you change that, in this case it seems to be okay, but when writing poetry we must be careful not to run with dialogue or story in a poetry format.
That is really good. I read through it once before reading the notes and thought it might have been a lover, but then reading the notes really clarified. You manage to pack a lot of stuff into this one tiny poem, which is really good. You dont drag it out with detail. Good job.
Good story. You have a pretty great plot idea here and I liked the story idea. There were a handful of things that I noticed that I would suggest to you. First off, you have Michael "falling in love" yet you portray him, in my mind, as nothing more than a small child. Much to small for that. I would tweak things and make him a bit older, probably mid to late teens. You also don't say anything about his parents. It might be good to have a line in there saying he lived with his grandfather beca...
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