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I'm not generally a fan of poems longer then 10 lines but this one was striking enough that I read it aloud to myself a few times. I liked the circular motion of it. For instance the way you began the first four stanzas with "He learns" and then the action changes... first art doing something to him, then to him then him seeing, becoming, then becoming again- "he sits, and becomes sculpture". The use of scrawls (sounds like crawls) was also very effective. The Negatives Some of the punctuatio...