I like what you are trying to do here, but it is very rough and needs some work. I like the observations you make and the character you've created, but this seems more like a journal entry or a blog post than flash fiction. I think that if you were to flesh out this character and pepper her observations with actions and interactions, this could be a good story. I hope that helps. Good start!

I like the fact that I was caught by surprise in the second paragraph when I realized that this was a retelling of Goldilocks and the three bears. Very clever! The story was amusing and I enjoyed reading it. However, other than the setting and the protagonist, there's not enough original about this story to really make it more than a straight retelling. I think that you have a good start, but could do a lot more to really raise the irony and tounge-in-cheek nature of the story. You could keep...

This is great! Very nice piece of Nanofiction and very well done! Keep up the good work!

Not bad. I didn't find myself surprised or shocked at all by the last line, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. However, I think with a little work the last sentence could be more of a twist.

I think that this is a nice idea, but it's not very original. That's not a bad thing, but I think you could take this and put your own original stamp on it. It also doesn't feel very lyrical to me. Rather, it reads like a series of short statements that don't really flow from one to the next. Try rewording these and adding your personality and I think you'll have something really good.

I am not sure exactly how Urbis has partnered with Google, so I can't speak directly to that portion of your criticism. That being said, I do not agree with your assertion that using Google is like saying your are ignorant. Rather, I think it would be ignorant for me to say that I don't need Google. You seem to be making the argument that a writer who doesn't always know the right word or words isn't worth his or her salt, and I disagree. For thousands of years, writers and poets alike have w...

This is a nice sentiment. The lyrics are good in spots and just okay in others, but I like the story behind the story. My only recommendation would be to address some of the rhyming words that struck me as a bit hokey "holy cow" and "bow wow" unless they fit the idea you were driving at, of course.

Nice poem. I had to read it through twice to catch that the "you" was not one of the women mentioned in the second stanza, but that may have been my miss. Once I did catch that, I saw the thread of regret and felt it come through in the last stanzas. nice work!

Very nice. Hard to say a lot about a six-word memoir, but I think this one uses every word to the fullest. A lot of complexity in the thought that there's futility in any combination of six words... or many more, for that matter. :)

General thoughts on content and story: Content wise, this is an interesting story, but it's too short. Should be a few thousand words longer with the same action and scenes, just expanded upon. It seems too quick that you get from him heading into town to passing out in front of his house. Also, perhaps I am missing something, but the toxin thing made sense to me until the end, when I'm not sure why it was coming from the girl. Was that supposed to mean that she was also a VBN? If so, maybe t...