Beautifully written. Touching ending. 1st paragraph, "The year, just..." Should it be this year or something? Maybe it needs different punctuation? "Cremains...bone" - fantastic detail. Adored the third paragraph. well done.

This is in the top ten weirdest things I've ever read here. critique? Use spell check. 'getting steered'? are you a madman? Just checking.

Wonderful. Well written. Critique for this is hard but I thought that in, "This abomination, their abomination" you could maybe use a comma after the second abomination to correct the pacing there. Overall fantastic. You leave me wanting more.

The details about how Elizabeth feels about her housekeeper in paragraph two really show insight into her character. Very nice. "Elizabeth’s saw" - should be 'Elizabeth saw' - no need to pluralize or show ownership here. "his body straightened with granite resolve" - great image. WOW! Wasn't expected that ending at all! I love it. She's quite the character and there is just the right amount of mystery at the end. Well done.

"two afraid" - should be 'too afraid' I like the title. It holds the theme up well. As a piece of flash on it's own I don't know how much I like it. It is a good set-up for a character piece or a short story. She sounds like so many young girls who model themselves after the rich and famous while masking their own insecurities.

This is a fantastic detail about a child right about my daughter's age so forgive if I get sentimental. You have such great details that ring true, Yehwoe, 1, 2, 3, the sorting. This is tightness. Love 'corrugated'. Hard to improve upon but maybe more of an intro into how she fell in love with them. The backstory. The only word choice I question is 'glob'. It's a wet, thick, maybe even sticky word. 'colorful clusters' - I know, alliteration, or 'colorful knots', just a thought.

In the third line you don't need to say 'I think to myself', the italics imply inner thought here. 'hideosity' is awkward here. I don't know if it's the word itself or the alliteration with 'head' but I would tidy this sentence up with 'reflection', you wouldn't need 'looks back at me in the glass'. Suicide is a good topic for a flash. The character sounds like your typical hormone-driven, dramatic teenager screaming at the world. Maybe a little peek into a recent event that triggered the mood?

Very nice. I like the big ears, the flat-foot boots, and of course, the cookies. The repetition of _push_, _tweet_, and _good_ makes me want a phrase repeating back to him by the she with the pale fingers. What does she say? pink cotton is lovely.

"starts to wander" = wanders +2 "begins to swell" = swells +2 "newly mopped" = clean +1 If you decided to go with those changes you would have five more words to play with. I'd love to see more of his penis. I mean, actually, that _is_ what I mean.

I would cut your first line and start the story with his name. It will seem less like I'm picking up part way through a story, and more like catching it from the beginning. The focus of the story is Rino so the first line being his name would work well. I like the obsession with the man. The concept of idolizing a paparazzi is great. I am a little confused as to whether the person who is going to be photographed is Rino or another celebrity. "hold his own with a martini" - needs a comma after...