The numerical progression in paragraph 2 is interesting, but doesn't really lead anywhere. You might consider either expanding it, or eliminating it entirely. The 4 paragraph starts rather abruptly. You might wish to add some context to "It was a two-acre block of land", and the sentence as a whole scans poorly. It could benefit from a rewrite. An "of" is missing between "a violation" and "county building codes". The first sentence of paragraph 6 is long, and should be split. The indenting in...