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AGE: 16
LOC: Cooperstown, NY
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 22

My name is Erin.
I am 15.
I live in New York.
I love writing, but i usually have to be in the mood (aka something drastic has to happen)
I write mostly when im depressed (or think i am :P)
I also love music, its my life.
Likes: hiking, backpacking, softball, ultimate frisbee, rafting, rivers, anime and manga, reading, video games, etc.

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The first sorrow was love but not a kindled love. Arms that don't return the hug; Stiff, hopeless, unresponsive. She closed her eyes and he was gone.   The second sorrow was loss. Losing her friends, her family the one that she loved. Losing herself. Pieces scattered throught her life. Can someone lead her to the lost and found?   The third sorrow was loneliness. When love is gone. No one for her to turn to, no shoulder to weep on, As she slipped deeper and deeper Into the...
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Sukie In The Graveyard
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If someone says "Is this okay?" you say? Almost here. What would best describe your personality? Hunting for witches. What do you like in a guy/girl? Simple things. How do you feel today? Company car. What is your life's purpose? Specialist. What is your motto? Molasses. What do your friends think of you? When the day met the night. What do you think about very often? The kids don't stand a chance. What is 2 + 2? The story of a girl. What do you think of your best friend? Phantom li...
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It's A Mad World After All Pain engulfs the world with colours of Tyrian purple, where sorrow comes as often as guidance from a teacher. Pictures of death and torture contradict the signs of the lamb and tattered clothed children sit in what was once a beautiful world. Could heaven have sunken to the fiery depths of hell? Or does God not see these horrors. Or has the last bead of life fallen from the end of the necklace? All we can do is whisper and pray.
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Non-fiction / A Writer: 6 Word Memoir
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Pours out the ink of emotions.
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Poetry / Enough
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Your harsh words cut through me like a knife, Crushing my dignity, my integrity; Questioning my loyalty, Saying I don't care situation wise. You play the game; the hand you've been dealt, The sympathy card. But your moves don't trick me anymore. I will not fall victim to your lies. For I've been here before. The countless feet that have trampled my existence. Every time i let them break me, But no longer will I suffice. It's over. I will not go through my life, By letting myself feel pain lik...
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Haiku/Senryu / untitled
Its a beautiful poem, but the part that says set alight the town doesnt sound right to me. Still a good haiku though, good job! What game was it?
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Poetry / Deaf
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Poetry / Six Word Memoir
Well Twin, I have to say that I like yours a whole lot more than mine. The emotion sounds real and not fake emo like mine :p
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Chapter One - The Soelé
Some mistakes I found: 1 "inkeeper, a small, wiry man" There should be a dash (-) or a semicolon or something because it seems that it runs on. 2 typo: "shpouting" 3 "he was gesturing wildly" Who was gesturing wildly 4 "Was found with my flute" Probably should be I was found with my flute Anyways, overall I rather enjoyed this story. Even though it has the general idea of a fantasy story, you make it unique with your different characters and their different personalities. The flute and a star...
Poetry / Frisco
This was amusing to read because it sums up the entire city life. Nothing to edit besides a few grammar mistakes. Overall well done.