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LOC: Lenoir, NC
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: April 17
LOC: Lenoir, NC
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: April 17
I am the poet sitting in the corner, drinking absinthe and discoursing with the shadows while you go about your daily routine and make a million dollars.
I am the shadows, lingering in the bar by the dead poet’s cinerary urn, fashioned in the shape of a laurel and a chariot’s bright star shining.
I am the absinthe, slow death creeping upon middle-aged wormwood recitals and soliloquies spoken to satyrs under penalty of death and out the window with the Turkish tobacco smoke.
I am the smoke, lingering above the heads of the faithful, incense oblations offered to the god of cancer and his minions in the fields harvesting the leaves of green, succulent disease and damnation.
I am the harvester, sweat stained brow beaten and bludg…
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Fade Into You By Matt McGuire The stars trailed off behind us as we blazed through the cool desert night in my old convertible the summer before you died. We rushed towards the silver black horizon holding hands and trying not to look at each other. I was taking you away from nothing, really. We were headed towards nothing and running from nothing into a future of nothingness that didn’t matter anymore because we had three months, tops. The doctor whose name I can’t remember told you that you...
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Henna By Matt McGuire I come from the cities of the plain Long tresses Blackest ebony eyelets Embers glowing softly The music of the night Nurturing and noir Saibaba sings somnolence The memory of my man keeps me whole while the Turkish tyrant reaves my soul for a rupee and a rose Rend my flesh for the butcher Leave my saffron remains for the carrion birds Foul flesh eaters Fur-lined gloves glaze garrulous and gabardine a peasant queen Saharan majesty and the flower of his eye no more I say n...
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Gethsemane Tears of blood tear the mantle of the hours spent in limbo Sensuous temple slave saints linger in the halls of Diana singing hymns of my pain Punish me slowly as a Son Sacramental gall witch wine dulls the soul’s thin ghastly virtue Eyes foreign to the blind deaf and dumb bones Pyre blazes upon the cooling deathdark sands The pale glimmer of twilight torment Dead Sea alive with torches Holy seafarers tarry The conjurers of fate and fear Iberian gaol ghosts and succubi slumber Scarl...
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Gethsemane Tears of blood tear The mantle of the hours Spent in limbo Sensuous Temple slave saints linger in the Halls of Diana savoring My pain Punish me slowly As a Son Sacramental gall Witch wine Dulls the soul’s thin ghastly Virtue Eyes foreign to the blind Deaf and dumb Bones Pyre blazes upon the cooling deathdark sands The pale glimmer of twilight Torment Dead Sea alive with torches Holy seafarers tarry The conjurers of fate and Fear Iberian gaol ghosts and succubi The slumber Of my com...
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Two For the Road We took off that summer, two latter-day saints hell bent for ladder bars on bad trucker speed for the end of the road that ran cross-country to the left coast and through nothing but brush, bastards and beltways. We were getting away from our deadpan lives and our dead end jobs at the Circle K. Wherever we went, there we were, but where we were was getting us nowhere so somewhere else sounded better than there. I was popping two pearly white gravestones an hour and you were h...
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You have many misspelled and misused words in this piece. At least twice you substitute "to" when it should be "too". You left out the "d" in "should've". This piece is honest and raw, but cliche nonetheless. "Untrue tries" I think is your best phrase. Keep writing, and good luck with this and any future projects.
Nice use of words, but much too vague. "Wrap him in vestals robes" was, I think, your best line. Newborns are virginal and sweet wrapped in their swaddling clothes, eh? "She shorn him with her wrinkles" is a really bad line. I would seriously think about amending it. "Lecherous imminence" is also a disturbing and contextually weak phrase. "Maxed out on Hooch at the birth"? Is that a reference to the obstetrician getting loaded while delivering the child? Very vague in relation to the rest of ...
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This is effing great. Tough, tight and well-informed. You certainly know your material. There were a few misspelled words: I'd seriously iron those out before you send this to the publisher. Otherwise, great friggin' read. Meat and Jake are very believable. I'd have been a little more interested if the narrator had taken part in the bar fight, but no matter. The rugby descriptions, the brands of beer, the super tight sentences and the action packed narrative were all very compelling. Was Jake...
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