The imagery is sound and the message of self harm is pretty clear to me. The poem flowed well and I think you've got a great style. Keep it up.

Even with a very basic rhyming scheme it had nice imagery. Very well thought out and seems polished. Keep it up.

The content matter is something I can appreciate. Personally I think this poem would do better if you didn't stick to a rhyme scheme. Some of the word usage is a bit awkward but you can tell the author actually cared about the subject. Try a different style with this poem and see how you like it.

A lot of pain in this poem. It's short and sweet and very to the point. I think it could probably do with more content actually. Perhaps another write up expandind on what the drinking does to the author, or perhaps more content about the downward spiral towards a lack of love. Good work either way.

The actual choice to redeem one's self from a life of sin isn't easy. You reflect the inner turmoil that one would have to go through in order to obtain it. The poem flowed well and your grammer and punctuation also seemed tip top. An enjoyable read to be sure.

"Will they will fade away" sounds a bit confusing. Try "Will they now fade away " instead. It could probably do well to be a bit longer, but overall a good short poem.

10 out of 10. I remember a time of my own that felt just like that. Extremely well written and the orange juice imagery worked flawlessly. Kudos.

Something in this screams power. I would love to know what the inspiration for this was as it seems very motivated. The flow was very good and your descriptors and imagery also assisted in this very gritty poem. Definitely worth polishing and trying to submit for professional review. Eliatt

Excellent children's poem. I'd love to read more. Not much more to say other then keep writing :)