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AGE: 20
LOC: Gardena, CA
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Version 1
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everydays passin by and im fighting with life everythings goin wrong now im lookin for right my, feeling is weak so, im feeling for might i pray the darkness dies so i keep livin for light in spite, of the time that im givin to fight im still lookin at hoes that are blindin my sight and these bitches can bite cuz their fangs are so bright unluckily out of the bunch, im choosin a wife and they tear at my heart, like they using a knife but im losin my life, yeah confusin to write, yeah ab...
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Poetry / Symphony
Version 2
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  A lovely sound roams through the ground, and seductively it tears. Straight through the wind alluring hymn, which flows about the air. Wings are flapping, so enchanting, Angels start to sing. The hymn so soothing, ever moving, affecting everything. As a thousand twangling instruments, hum about thine ears my hearts promising drum beat will deliver you from fear. Don’t you hear? those voices whispering, promising false dreams to thee but I vow pleasant dreams for thi...
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Poetry / The Kingdom
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 her image was raw i picked up the kick heaven gave me a call to be with her, to miss her, and love above all her blessing essence present through every wall we could rise above all, and we would stand tall i'd extend my hand so that she may never fall from the moment that i saw, inside of baby doll i was stable, she was able to freeze my jaw with the story as a fable and appease the law i'd cease increased friends cant please them all and i'd label her face, as the beauty that i sought ...
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Lyrics / Sunshine
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Sunshine, she was all around and i, miss the days when i hear the sound of her, as she walkin down from the clouds just to hug me to love me and, hold me down leave my, eyes astound when she, walk the ground but lately, i feel that its so vacant now her name was the noun that would make me proud just to heal me and feel me and, hold my crown but the, queen would leave, and the, throne would be split, she sits, and doesn't notice me from my castle she took the key and she took the sight to see...
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Poetry / Symphony
Version 1
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A lovely sound roams through the ground, and seductively it tears straight through the wind, alluring hymn, which flows about the air wings are flapping, so enchanting, Angels start to sing the hymn so soothing, ever moving, affecting everything as a thousand twangling instruments, hum about thine ears my hearts promising drum beat will deliver you from fear don't you hear, those voices whispering, promising false dreams to thee but I vow pleasant dreams for thine eyes to feel and see where A...
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haha. this definitely applies to everyones life.
Definitely too long for a song. And as for the chorus... maybe something along the lines of: "Kiss me before i die, help me feel so alive." maybe repeated twice? just a suggestion. nonetheless, these lyrics were very endearing, and they definitely made me laugh/smile.
Lyrics / :*(onfusion
i REALLY liked this piece. it honestly sounds like something a Good rock band would sing. the lyrics/rhyme scheme hits hard, which is great, and the content is clear as well.
Poetry / untitled
this piece was not only clear and enjoyable but fairly deep. "seeing faults and hiding in cures that don't last"...my favorite line. however, it feels unfinished to me. that last time didnt capture me as i would've liked.
it was a very entertaining piece, but i feel as if it needs something. Like something to tie it all together. It was extremely entertaining. Maybe some separations inbetween stanzas to clarify thoughts, because as a reader it looks messy and although it is all the same idea you need some type of pause indications.
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