This piece has nice flow. and almost floats as you read it. Beautiful imagery until the last line. . I could use alittle tweetking to connect tohe last as it leaves on feeling blank. It apparent you have real talent, finish this piece with the wonderful flow you show in the rest of this piece..good luck...

Wow how thought provoking, To be alive is to have been dead at some point. and only few are wize enough to know that....well done my friend

I always take notes as I review. And this was like taking notes on my on life. This piece is well written.There are a couple of spelling errors but in writing somethings this deep it's hard not to get it all on paper without mistyping somewhere. The head goes faster than the hands. Thank God I didn't follow all these steps but many have. And alot can identify with each of these feeling. Keep up the good work the more we shair the more we help one another. You are an impressive writter.....

My dear friend, You are the queen of words..I loved this piece If only I were the heartless Bitch Medusa. This poem is so in tune to where I am at this point and I think I just may borrow your last two lines for my x husband. What else can I say but fabulous, darling fabulous!!!!!!!

This piece has wonderful freestyle. exposing those that lie and abide. then become licked kicked and cut up. shows that all things have a coast but the last also shows that if given a chance and love, all wrongs can be forgiven. I like your work and I think you can do well in this area..Lots of luck....

This work shows your sad side. and is so very well written. to feel as if you stand alone and only mime what is going on around you is a feeling I too shair. I amazes me how people will repeat the same things that screwed them up. God know the souls that feels pain when faced with these problems and he also knows those who have impenitence. And those are doomed to repeat their fate time a nd time again. You are a true poet. And I am a better person for having the pleasure of reading your work...

Wow, such heat and passion. Your writing is captivating. I am jeolous of the one who makes you burn so intensively. Your work still makes me smile and wish just once that someone would have such a passion for me...Well Done.....Vickie

I found this a good read and more true than most will admit.It's a simple poem but that's the beauty of it. some think they have to make things hard to understnad for it to be god work. which I do not agree with.A peopm that can be understood today as well as a hundred years ago or a hundred years from now is true poetry to me. very well done.....

This poem hit me very deeply as my mother just passed away. and there was many I asked for help. and many that told me not to continue to try. but I did anyway. Like in your peom I had to tell her many times, I'm not going anywhere. I tried to let the light in. to brighten her day. Your poem is so very touching. I held her hand many days. And grew Jaded because my siblings wouldn't help. She had dementia so I had to hold her like a child. This is such a wonderful piece of work. God bless you ...

Your work caught me off guard. As My Mother just passed away. Love for someone is so beautiful yet painful. and your words draw this out wonderfully.My step father is the only father I have ever known and to watch his pain is so very hard. This poem had to come from your soul and heart. thankyou for shairing it with us.....Vickie