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AGE: 22
LOC: North Branch, MI
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 13

Hi! I’m a person that writes words in English.

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Children's / The Wormwood Tree
Version 1
15 Reviews   4 Comments
"I'm hungry," Grasshopper said. "Have been. Will be." He took off his old top hat with one thin hand as he scratched his head. "My head, it hurts. It aches. Headaches." He sat on the ground, leaning his malnourished frame against a pebble. Fish was perched in the top branches of the Wormwood Tree. He nodded. "You should have listened to Ant." "I don't want to hear that name!" Grasshopper lamented. "There's an easy way out of this, I just have to find it." "Always taking the easy route isn't v...
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Version 2
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Back To The Way It Oughta Be I'm a field of juniper trees, and under the trees sit dozens of giant teddy bears and all they want to do is hug you but they're on fire. I'm drying my eyes and I have an idea, I'm the thicket and the mire. Worry do I, for fear of karmic repurcussions to my little neck hairs Would I be remiss to fill out your little private mad lib? You have your saving graces, like being late for work Oh, I thought your clock ticked backwards... and the windows and doors that bre...
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Short Story / Sabbatical
Version 1
1 Review   0 Comments
Once upon a time in a land so very far away. That's what you'd expect. It may or may not be true. It happened, yes, in a time, though not too long ago. And the land far away part, that's just relative to where you are. Or where I am. Burning Bibles with a Zippo in Indiana is what I'm doing, and where I am. It's what I do. You open the drawer in a hotel room to put in your socks, trouser, sex toys, and like a sore left unchecked it festers in the dark, waiting to convert you as you scramble fo...
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Poetry / Block Party
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1 Review   0 Comments
My eyes are heavy in my head, or more accurately, my lids, but my mind is running figure-eights, thoroughly, like fits, and at the cross of the eight, the little pinch, the skinny waist, one point manifests itself to every sense, sight, touch, smell, sound, and taste. This one point dares consume me, my skin condusive, tinder, and my blood begins to boil, and reason have I devouring to hinder? I don't think so. If not for the advancement of theory to fact, for what does a man live? Everything...
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Version 1
3 Reviews   0 Comments
Back To The Way It Oughta Be I'm a field of juniper trees, and under the trees sit dozens of giant teddy bears and all they want to do is hug you but they're on fire. I'm drying my eyes and I have an idea, I'm the thicket and the mire. Worry do I, for fear of karmic repurcussions to my little neck hairs Would I be remiss to fill out your little private mad lib? You have your saving graces, like being late for work Oh, I thought your clock ticked backwards... and the windows and doors that bre...
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Poetry / Child's Wisdom
It's very staccato. Very start/stop. It was hard to maintain a flow in my head so I read it aloud, and though the problem was not as severe, it was still evident enough to address. As far as the subject matter is concerned, I enjoyed to imagery but I think you must get outside your comfort zone to truly express yourself.
Sci Fi & Fantasy / The Fleetswirl
I think this may need some work. I can detect a glimmer of a potentially interesting story in here, but this draft is too bogged down by unclear syntax and haphazard descriptions of scenery and character. I think you may want to reduce the amount of numbers in this. At first glance the text almost appears like an exerpt from an instruction manual. An anti-mathematics person such as myself could be put off by them. Also, your description of the protagonist may offend women in my the same way B...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Freedom of Minds: Chapter One
Paragraph 1 - I did not like how you put ‘rewarded’ in quotations. I found it offensive to my intelligence that you think the reader can't figure out the sarcasm is context. P. 2 - "The enemies were so thick at the base of the high wall the dead were still standing, pressed among their comrades." - I liked that a lot. It coaxed out of me an audible "Mhph." (That sound is kinda like an "Oh wow, cool" by the way.) P. 3 - I think you can come up with a better way to describe it than "take out." ...
Haiku/Senryu / Water Realm
I don't think you should use the word dreams. You should maintain consistency. Lines 1 and 2 are about water, naturally that would lead one to assume line 3 ought to be as well. Don't tell the reader it's about dreams, or the moon, or hamburgers, or whatever, you should SHOW him or her. Mske him or her come to the realization of true meaning on his or her own time.
Poetry / Todd
"Yesterday circumstance lead me past your house" I like that a lot. I know if I were in that position, I'm sure there would be a "circumstance" involved that would find me wandering back to check in on an old flame. To me this poem is about growing up, maturing, and finding yourself older than those around you, maybe not in age, but in mindset. I think it's well written though kind of plain in diction. It did conjure images in my head, but they weren't very detailed. I realize you were going ...
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