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AGE: 41
LOC: New Zealand
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: December 14

I’m a published author, of fiction, quirky, filled with all sorts of fun characters and their crazy lives. Had a second book Near A Canal published in New Zealand – critics and booksellers seemed to love it – phew!

Now concentrating on book reviews at http://wheldonreviews.blogspot.com/

Wheldon

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Criticism / A Distant Feast
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A Distant Feast: A History Of New Zealand's Cuisine Tony Simpson Published by Godwit Potatoes sit in fruit shops and supermarkets without making any fuss. They appear as a common offering, surrounded by the bright greens and yellows and reds of other fruit and vegetables. Some have been subjected to the tortuous experience of being cleaned, others are displayed hidden beneath layers of dirt. However, they have a deep sense of pride, knowing that they are the most widely cultivated vegetable i...
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / The Love Song
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T.S. Eliot - The Love Song Of J. Alfred Prufrock When I first read this poem I was eighteen, at university, starting out on a degree in English literature. 20th century American poetry was a highlight for an eighteen year old, the lives and the poetry, the casting aside of tradition, of form and expression, of seeking a new way of saying something, of even endeavouring to say something new, to take literature on a new path. I read this poem once and instantly knew that it was going to take so...
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Hi I see where you're coming from, but I don't connect with it. The words you use are too obvious, I can't get inside the words, actually feel what you are feeling, there's not a sense of intimate trembling, yearning, anger - you're telling me what you are feeling rather than being lost within the moment, the poet is standing at a distance showing me rather than taking my hand and placing me within the poem. It is not bad, far from it, but it is almost like watching a TV vs watching a movie a...
Hi I'm always kind, send me any poetry you like. I hope you're writing this and not feeling it - can I assume you are writing - in which case I would suggest that you make it more specific, let me in on your secret, who are you talking to, what exactly is going on. Perhaps you could focus on one single thing, narrow the poem down to ripping a flower, or a leaf, or doing the dishes and smashing one on the floor - just so the reader has a focus - and your intensity also has a focus. Intensely f...
Hi! Well, I can honestly say I've never read a genre such as this - of which I'm sure there's a market. Very funny, oddball. Only suggestion is a little more description. I sort of need to know what the characters actually look like - because although the comments about them are funny, they would be easier to apply if I knew what body types they were referring to - like what does the girl/woman (what age is she?) look like - and I don't actually know what Shaft looks like - although I don't k...
Short Story / FALL
Hi! I think this has potential - It might be an idea to figure out what exactly is the unique thing you are trying to portray - so that an agent will see straight away why this is different from many other books/movies around the same theme. Is it the music? If so, I think it is a great idea - and would probably like to see that worked into this opening chapter rather than just being at the beginning - then you'd have something to hook the reader into the character (who at the moment is just ...
Love it - not sure about the word lift - I understand what it means, but it doesn't quite seem to ring true? And not sure about using the words I guess in the last line - it may be that the stanza before is so good there is no need for these two lines that don't appear to add much to what has already been said. And in the first stanza - some people - you may want to be a little more specific - just to create a better image. hey, just some little thoughts if you're still working on it - but ov...